Talk:The Neutral Zone (Star Trek: The Next Generation)/GA1

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 15:30, 7 January 2013 (UTC)

• The guest actors section of the infobox needs a citation as there isn't one in the prose for the guest actors.
• Also, I don't see a source for any of the production credits in the body of the text, either.

• I've added the citations to the guest actors and production staff in the infobox that aren't otherwise mentioned in the text of the of the article (and cited there). Miyagawa (talk) 19:49, 9 January 2013 (UTC)

• Writing section: How did the fan fiction find its way into the hands of the producers, and is the episode verbatim of it, or were changes made in the script?

• Unfortunately that isn't covered in the sources, but what I think happened was this - Hurley had the idea for his new major aliens which was an insect race which obeyed a hive mind, but with the writers strike coming up they decided to use some fan fiction to bulk out the first part - and the second part was subsequently abandoned due to the lack of time (the first episode of the second season was adapted from the Phase II episode of the same name, which I'm sure I'll get around to soonish). When I started work on the episode I had hoped that the original fan fiction had made it's way onto the internet, but unfortunately it hadn't. This article used to have some uncited stuff about Harry Mudd originally being in the story, and I wonder if that came from the fan fiction (a crossover piece of fan fiction certainly sounds likely, but the actor who played Mudd died before the series started filming so that would have had to be changed. I'm not quite sure where the fan fiction came from, as there wasn't an internet at the time for it to sit on. I know fans used to post in plot ideas and its entirely plausible that one got picked up. Miyagawa (talk) 19:43, 9 January 2013 (UTC)

• This is just my opinion, but I think some context about the reintroduction of the Romulans into Star Trek might need a little explaining. As I recall, TNG in the first season continually struggled with finding a threatening enemy after the reception of the Ferengi in "The Last Outpost." For someone unfamiliar with the series, it might be helpful also to explain that the major TOS enemy, the Klingons, wasn't feasible for TNG and that the Borg would later successfully present a more pressing antagonist.

• I've incorporated a source from Memory Alpha to include that, and also came across the writers/directors guide written before the series which explains about the Klingons - although by that point, Klingons had already been used in a warlike context and the banned Vulcans appeared in Conspiracy. Miyagawa (talk) 22:28, 9 January 2013 (UTC)

• Again from Memory Alpha, it would be useful to note that James Conway also considered the episode to be a weaker showing for the end of the season.

• Added it as a quote and a minor expansion to the writing section, the bit about it being literally a first draft is interesting. Considering how much Roddenberry ripped apart the scripts during the earlier part of that season it must have driven him mad to be using a first draft. Miyagawa (talk) 20:04, 9 January 2013 (UTC)

• Dab links tool is showing two disambiguation problems: Neutral Zone and Maurice Hurley.

• Fixed those links. Miyagawa (talk) 19:43, 9 January 2013 (UTC)

• Dup links tool returning no problems. Article is illustrted by images with appropriate lisencing and has no aparent stability or neutrality problems.

I am placing the article on hold pending improvements. Will check back. —Ed!^(talk) 15:49, 7 January 2013 (UTC)

Great work! I'm satisfied with the changes so I'm passing the article for GA. —Ed!^(talk) 12:44, 10 January 2013 (UTC)