Talk:The One After the Superbowl/GA1

GA Review

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Hey, I'll be reviewing this article. Ah, I remember this episode... Anyways, check out Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for a guideline on how I'll be setting this up. Let's get started! The Flash ^{talk} 02:14, 25 September 2009 (UTC)

Lead

• "Guest stars in the episode include[...]" -> everybody you mention appear to be all the people who guest star, so you shouldn't say "include."
• First paragraph is out of place. "Guest stars in the episode[...]" should be moved after "The network's decision to air the episode directly[...]" to fix it.
• "[...]written by Michael Borkow, and the second[...]" -> "Borkow and the"
  • Y All done.

Plot summary

• "[...]a monkey that reminds him of Marcel on a beer commercial[...]" -> huh? Give context to the reader by mentioning who Marcel is.
• Wikilink "elementary school"
• Wikilink "panties"
• "[...]meet the movie's star Jean-Claude Van Damme" -> what movie?
  • The movie that Marcel stars in. The whole paragraph is about that movie.
    • Oh, they never mention the name of the movie? The Flash ^{talk} 19:18, 25 September 2009 (UTC)
      • No, I don't think so. Theleftorium 19:28, 25 September 2009 (UTC)
        • Okay then, Y check. The Flash ^{talk} 21:03, 25 September 2009 (UTC)
• "[...]reunites with Marcel, and Joey lands[...]" -> "Marcel and Joey"
  • Y All done.

Production

• "Shields' said she was asked to appear on the show[...]" -> "when she was asked"
• "[...]Perry at the time,[11][12][13][14] and an audience[...]" -> "time and and"
  • Y All done.

Reception

• "[...]a 47 percent audience share[...]" -> you should explain what this means to non-cable-rating-savvy readers (like myself, lol :P)
  • Wikilinked.
• "[...]made him "nauseous", and commented[...]" -> ""nauseous" and commented"
  • Y All done.
• Found some more:
  • Nielsen Rating is a double redirect.
  • File:Jean-Claude Van Damme June 2, 2007.jpg would be better replaced with File:Van Damme, Jean Claude (USAF).jpg
  • Wikilink to DVD Talk in both the text and ref 30.
    • Y All done.

Images

• Both are tagged properly - no complaints here.

Final say

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Thanks for getting to all those issues, because I've gone ahead and passed this article! :) The Flash ^{talk} 02:14, 26 September 2009 (UTC)

Thank you very much for the review! :) Theleftorium 08:41, 26 September 2009 (UTC)