Talk:The Ones (30 Rock)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 20:25, 9 April 2010 (UTC)

Overall this article is good, though I found a couple issues:

• "At the beginning of the episode, Jack and Liz are at a jewelry store, in which Jack is searching for an engagement ring for Elisa, was filmed at a Cartier store located in New York's Fifth Avenue." Not grammatically sound. Maybe 'It was filmed' or modify how it's written.
  • I think I got it. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 20:42, 9 April 2010 (UTC)
• "which Jenna misquotes actress Julia Roberts' character from the romantic comedy Notting Hill (1999)." Maybe 'misquotes from actress..' would sound better.
  • Done.
• "As with Sepinwall, Bob Sassone of AOL's TV Squad believed Jenna's subplot was fair writing it was great in parts but "it just went on too long and got tedious and silly."" Feels like it's missing a word or comma around the fair writing note.
  • I think I got it.

I'll put it on hold and will pass it when the few nitpicks are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 20:25, 9 April 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. :) --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 20:42, 9 April 2010 (UTC)

No problem. Looks good now, so article passes. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 22:33, 9 April 2010 (UTC)

Thank you for taking the time to review this. :) --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:39, 9 April 2010 (UTC)