Talk:The Post-American World/GA1

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This was in the literature section but I feel that it belongs in politics. I will readjust later. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Criterion 1: well-written

Lead

1. Comma needed - "In the book Zakaria argues that". Place a comma after "book". When you begin a sentence with a directional note (reference to time, place, position, etc.) then place a comma after it. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

2. Comma use - "other countries such as China and India, are becoming global players in many fields." Either remove the comma after "India" or place a comma after "countries". Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

3. Clarification - "The book was said" said by whom? Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Background

1. Comma use - "of Foreign Affairs magazine, before accepting" The comma in front of "before" is inappropriate. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

2. Comma needed - "During this time Zakaria's political" See note for Lead 1. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

3. Comma use - "pro-market stances, and to the point" Either remove the comma or add "shifted" after "and". Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

4. Comma use - "In subsequent years he watched" and "Over the next few years Zakaria developed" See note for Lead 1. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Synopsis

1. Comma use - "thesis of the book, that a" replace the comma with a long dash or a colon, preferably the colon. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

2. Comma use - "emerging challenges, and that there" - remove the comma or place "believes" after "and". Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

3. Comma needed - "At the same time Zakaria sees" See note for Lead 1. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Style and comparisons

1. It would be nice to mention the names of critics that are quoted in the first paragraph, but it is not completely necessary. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

General

1. Just make sure to watch tenses and don't let it switch around on you. I didn't see anything major in this area, but there are little things - in Reception paragraph two, it has past tense along with "Hari points". Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Criterion 2: factually accurate and verifiable

Most of the sources are offline and unaccessible, so I must AGF on them. Nothing stood out that seemed questionable, and there was heavy use of quotes. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Criterion 3: broad in its coverage

From what I can tell, nothing appears to be missing. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Criterion 4: neutral

No challenges of neutrality and I don't know enough to warrant to say that it is non-neutral. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Criterion 5: stable

Appears to be stable from what I can tell. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Criterion 6: illustrated, if possible, by images

Image of the book cover and two text boxes provide multiple illustrations. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

• Thanks for the review. I have made the suggested changes here. maclean 19:21, 16 August 2009 (UTC)