Talk:The Return (The Office)/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Gen. Quon in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 20:55, 27 January 2012 (UTC)Reply

Checking against GA criteria

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    "Helms recorded his cell phone ring on his own computer, and actually bloodied his knuckles while punching the wall, something that took five or six takes." Maybe separate into two sentences because they are complete separate issues.
    "Steve Carell and Rainn Wilson had difficulty with their reuniting scene and had to stage in several different ways; imaging and photographic equipment, materials and services company Kodak sponsored the scene." This sentence makes no sense. Please separate and write it more clearly. I'm not sure if Kodak is an imaging and photographic company, or if Kodak provided the equipment and I don't understand why this effects Carell and Wilson
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    All good.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    Thorough coverage, no sign of trivia
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
    Neural POV
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
    No edit warring
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    Two pictures, properly tagged. I would recommend adding a more thorough caption like: "Andy snaps and punches a hole in the wall. Ed Helms actually bloodied his knuckles while punching the wall." or "Andy snaps and punches a hole in the wall. "The Return" marked Helms' departure from The Office until the season's nineteenth episode "The Negotiation"."
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    On hold for seven days for above issues to be addressed.--Gen. Quon (talk) 01:06, 28 January 2012 (UTC)Reply
Good suggestions which I have now added. Thanks for the review! Ruby 2010/2013 02:40, 29 January 2012 (UTC)Reply
Excellent! I pass the article! Congrats! :)--Gen. Quon (talk) 04:02, 29 January 2012 (UTC)Reply