Talk:The Smeezingtons/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Mr. Gonna Change My Name Forever (talk · contribs) 00:43, 7 March 2014 (UTC)

This is my second GA review. I hope you enjoy my upcoming description. IX|(C"<) 00:43, 7 March 2014 (UTC)

This article looks okay at first, but I don't believe it's really a potential GA; The Smeezingtons is quickfailed primarily because of questionable prose/grammar/NPOV choices:

1. Instances of rough, poor grammar prevail. For example: "Lawrence is responsible for connecting Levine and Mars. However, the team was only joined in 2009. After that, the three of them got to work for the next two years for over 10 hours every day."

• Fixed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:48, 8 March 2014 (UTC)

1. Sentence don't easily flow when it comes to bad prose: "In 2009, The Smeezingtons settled in Hollywood. Initially, their work was slow. However, it sped up when they started to work on Bruno Mars' debut album, Doo-Wops & Hooligans; they wrote and produced all of that album's songs"

• Corrected. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 22:20, 8 March 2014 (UTC)

1. The use of certain words like "blockbuster" and "hit" (in the musical context) are so un-NPOV.

• Replaced and corrected. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:57, 7 March 2014 (UTC)

1. This article needs expansion, maybe including more info about the critical reception of The Smeezingtons.

• Done. Should I nominated it again? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 00:45, 10 March 2014 (UTC)
  • Yes, go ahead. IX|(C"<) 02:23, 10 March 2014 (UTC)
    • Thank you, it's done. Should I remove the failed GA nomination? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:14, 14 March 2014 (UTC)

1. I saw some incomplete references in the "References" section.

• Fixed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:11, 8 March 2014 (UTC)

Once you fix these issues, The Smeezingtons will be at GAN again. I hope you do so. IX|(C"<) 01:06, 7 March 2014 (UTC)

• Thank you for your review, I will fix everything you pointed out. Thak you MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:47, 7 March 2014 (UTC)

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