Talk:The Ur-Quan Masters/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 14:03, 23 December 2020 (UTC)

Will get to this soon. ♦ jaguar 14:03, 23 December 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• I'd split the lead into two paragraphs to improve readability
• "based on the action-adventure science fiction game Star Control II" - de-link 'game'
• "It has been frequently mentioned among the best games of all time" - link List of video games considered the best
• "been downloaded nearly 2 million times" - two

Gameplay

• While not a prerequisite, can you find an image of gameplay?
• "The Ur-Quan Masters is a re-make of Star Control II" - this isn't italicised

Development

• "The sequel was ported to the 3DO Interactive Multiplayer console in 1994" - console is overlinking
• "By the early 2000s, the copyright in Star Control II reverted to Ford and Reiche" - copyright of or the rights to Star Control
• "Ford and Reiche still owned the copyrights in Star Control I and II" - again, would read better if it was rights to Star Control
• "Toys for Bob hired Chris Nelson as their first summer intern" - I didn't know what this was for a second. It would benefit from being linked
• "from the 3DO version of Star Control II as open-source" - this was already linked before and it didn't have a hyphen
• "The initial version was neither elegant nor fast, but Nelson had friends in the open source scene who could keep progressing with the project" - this sentence reads informally. 'Contacts' would be preferable, and who was saying that the initial version was neither elegant nor fast?

Modifications

• "HD" has a disambig citation. Just de-link it

Reception

• Low numbers should be written out in prose. "2 million" (two), "5 stars" (five)
• Magazines should be italicised (PC PowerPlay, RetroGamer and Pelit etc)
• "celebrating it as a timeless classic from the golden age of gaming" - this sounds like a quote
• "The game was also featured in Maximum PC's 2015 article about the 20 best free games" - clunky. Try The game was also featured in Maximum PC's 2015 "20 best free games" feature.

References

• The references are inconsistently formatted. Some have inconsistent date formats and there four references in citation 12 - why not give them separate citations?
• There are also five unused harv citations

This will need a bit of work before it meets the GA criteria. There are some minor formatting issues in the prose which could easily be fixed, but some of the references need to be smoothed out and the remaining harv references should be used or removed. I'll leave this  On hold until all above is clarified. Otherwise this is a good effort. ♦ jaguar 14:23, 23 December 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback! I tried to fix most of the things that you mentioned, including numbers, reference dates, and other formatting issues. A few outstanding issues:

• I don't understand what you mean by unused citations. I count 36 citations and they are all used to support facts in the prose.
• For reference 12, I have been advised in the past to use reference WP:BUNDLING, to improve organization and readability. I think this is a place where bundling makes sense, as it takes multiple references to establish the facts in the prose, but you don't really want to separate it out into that many footnotes.
• There are tons of pics that are licensed to the public for non-commercial use. For some reason I've always had trouble with the uploading interface from my browser. There's some great images of the semi-notable HD mod too.

Let me know about those last few things. Would also appreciate some help with the image part (and will ping the VG wikiproject). Shooterwalker (talk) 17:23, 23 December 2020 (UTC)

No worries Shooterwalker. There are several "Harv warning: There is no link pointing to this citation" warnings in the references which means there are citation templates not pointing to anything in the article. This isn't your fault as you've used bundling which combines multiple citations into one footnote. Don't worry about the gameplay image, while it isn't a requirement for GA it would be nice to have one. With all the other minor issues out of the way this meets the GA criteria, so I'll be happy to promote this. Good work! ♦ jaguar 16:15, 24 December 2020 (UTC)

That's great and hopefully someone else can help with the image. Merry Christmas and thanks for the review! Shooterwalker (talk) 17:52, 24 December 2020 (UTC)