Talk:The Velvet Underground & Nico/GA2

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Chiswick Chap in topic GA Review

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What a fascinating and well-written article. I'll see if I can help a little on this one. Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 09:17, 8 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • ranked 13th on Rolling Stone's list: better say "in 2003".
  • Is there any good reason to have such a long list of types of music? A short selection of the main ones would feel more encyclopedic, I think.
  • "most other forms of alternative music": not sure the "most" can be justified from the source, which is only making a rhetorical flourish there, and it's vague to the point of unverifiability. Suggest just say "other forms...".
  DoneelectricController 21:20, 11 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Recording

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  • "Collaborator Nico" has an odd ring (is she to be shot?). Suggest drop the Collaborator here as too prominent, or soften it with something like "Occasional...".
  DoneelectricController 21:20, 11 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Production

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  • First paragraph should be cited: not clear if that should be to Harvard 2007.
  DoneelectricController 16:29, 12 September 2017 (UTC)Reply
Does the citation cover the last sentence of the paragraph? Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:33, 12 September 2017 (UTC)Reply
Done.

Music and lyrics

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  • Does ref 19 (Heroin) cover the themes of "I'm Waiting for the Man" and "Venus in Furs"? Looks as if more refs are needed in first para of Themes.
  DoneelectricController 22:05, 11 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Artwork

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  • "The album was re-pressed onto heavyweight vinyl in 2008 and this edition also features the banana sticker." could be written "The album was re-pressed onto heavyweight vinyl in 2008, featuring a banana sticker."
  DoneelectricController 22:24, 11 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Back cover lawsuit

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  • "(taken at an Exploding Plastic Inevitable performance)" - might be helpful to add that this was a Warhol event, featuring the VU and Warhol "factory" members.
  DoneelectricController 15:30, 12 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Reception and sales

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  • "The critical world also took little notice of the album." - perhaps say "initially".
  • "from numerous rock critics, many of whom" - suggest drop the "numerous".
  DoneelectricController 21:20, 11 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Aftermath

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  • Citations needed.
  DoneelectricController 16:11, 12 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Reissues

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  • Citation needed re contractual dispute: I guess we can get away with uncontroversial material about reissue contents, but disputes are another matter.
  DoneelectricController 16:11, 12 September 2017 (UTC)Reply
No you haven't, you've commented the controversy out, which ain't the same thing at all. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:32, 12 September 2017 (UTC)Reply
I found a source. – electricController 17:02, 12 September 2017 (UTC)Reply
Thanks. There remain some other commented-out sections which would also be well worth including if they can be sourced. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:57, 12 September 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "According to the essay by music critic and historian Richie Unterberger contained within the set," - this is effectively a citation. It would be best to format it as such, little blue number and all, citing the box set's release date, number, publisher, etc.
  DoneelectricController 22:24, 11 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Notes

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  • "The album did not chart in the UK until 1994" should be "The album did not reach the UK charts until 1994". Also please replace "recharted" in the same note.
  • Ref 29 "Note, however, ..." should be changed to a footnote.
  DoneelectricController 21:20, 11 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Images

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  • All are relevant and acceptably licensed.

Bibliography

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  • Bockris and Malanga 1996, and Irvin and McLear 2007 are not linked from any citations.
  DoneelectricController 15:30, 12 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Summary

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