Talk:The Wolf of Wall Street (2013 film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kncny11 (talk · contribs) 20:01, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

I promise this one will take less time to comb through than The Hunger Games! You know the drill,  Working means I haven't finished it, but feel free to start making changes as soon as you see them appear.

Infobox and lede

• The statement that this is Scorcese's fifth collaboration with DiCaprio and second with Winter is not mentioned in the body

 Done removed Chompy Ace 12:50, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "with praise for Scorsese's direction, the comedic performances of DiCaprio and Hill, the screenplay, and the fast-paced and consistent humor" also not mentioned in the body

 Done removed Chompy Ace 12:50, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Plot

• Good length (686 words)
• WL Wall Street and stockbroker

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 12:57, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "sex and drug-fueled" → "sex– and drug–fueled"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 12:57, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• ""hard sell."" → ""hard sell"." per MOS:LQ

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 12:57, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "worth a lot less" → "worth much less"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 12:57, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Comma after "for his testimony"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 12:57, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Cast

• No need to include citations for anything except the uncredited cameo

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:01, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Development

• ", Jordan Belfort made $1 million on the movie rights." → "with Belfort making $1 million off the deal."

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:13, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Neither [15] nor [16] reference the Brad Pitt bidding war

 Done Removed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:13, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• [16] doesn't mention anything in the sentence to which it's tied

 Done Removed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:13, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Martin Scorsese was considered to direct the film,[17][18] during pre-production, Scorsese worked on the film's script before working on Shutter Island. This sentence needs to be rewritten for clarity, as I'm not sure I'm following at the moment.

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:13, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• [16] and [19] are the same reference under different numbers

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:13, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "had offered Ridley Scott to direct the film" → "had offered the directorial role to Ridley Scott"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:13, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Comma after "independent company Red Granite Pictures"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:13, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Comma after "came back on board"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:13, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Not immediately clear from the first three paragraphs that Scorcese outright abandoned directing the project for a while

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:13, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "and the film is even tamer in its depiction" needs a citation.

 Done Removed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:13, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Last sentence of the paragraph is a run-on that needs some rewriting for tone

 Done Removed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:14, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Filming

• "Hill announced on Twitter that his first day"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:23, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• MovieLoci.com doesn't seem like a very reliable source (it looks user-generated to me)

 Done Removed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:23, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Additionally, citations are needed for Harrison and Ardsley mentions

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:23, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• WL Vitamin D

 Done Chompy Ace 13:06, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• More context for Schoonmaker saying that the film would be shot digitally
• Comma after "proponent of shooting on film"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:23, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• End sentence after "photographed in 3D"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:23, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "however, The Wolf of Wall Street was originally planned to be shot digitally despite being filmed in 2D." → "Despite being filmed in 2D, The Wolf of Wall Street was originally planned to be shot digitally."

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:23, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Comma after "shot on film stock"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:23, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "the digital Arri Alexa camera system."

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:23, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Use of animals

• "the film's trading company" → "the trading company depicted in the film"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:30, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "for its symbol" → "as its symbol"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:30, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• The last sentence seems slightly out of place, and I'm wondering if this and the controversy on the use of animals should be put together in one section

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:30, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Profanity

• Guinness World Record needs a citation in the body

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:34, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• The junkiemonkeys link [53] is broken.

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:34, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Swearnet: The Movie needs a citation

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:34, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Release

• "It was previously slated to be released on November 15, 2013, but the date was pushed back after film cuts were made to reduce the run time." → "The film's original release date of November 15 was pushed back after cuts were made to reduce the run time."

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:46, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "set for a Christmas 2013 release." → "set for release that Christmas."

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:46, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Paramount officially confirmed the Christmas Day 2013 release date on October 29, 2013, with a running time of 165 minutes." → "On October 29, Paramount officially confirmed that the film would release on Christmas Day, with a running time of 165 minutes."

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:46, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "On November 25, 2013, the length was announced to be 179 minutes." → "This run time was changed to 179 minutes on November 25."

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:46, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "rated R by the Motion Picture Association"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:46, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "The film marks a change in film history" → "The release of The Wolf of Wall Street marks a shift in cinema history"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:46, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Link 35mm film in the first sentence, not the second

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:46, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Box office & critical response

• The Rolling Stone sentence needs a citation

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:49, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "wrote that the film did not work for her," → "was more critical"

 Done Chompy Ace 13:45, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "as an irresponsible glorification of Belfort and his associates"

 Done Chompy Ace 13:45, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "2nd best" → "second best"

 Done Chompy Ace 13:45, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Audience response

• "a rating lower than anything else in theaters the opening week of the film." → "the lowest rating of any film opening that week."

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:00, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Per MOS:DASH, either remove the spaces around the em dashes in the third paragraph, or replace them with en dashes

 Already done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:00, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• You only need [92] at the end of the third paragraph

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:00, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• ""beyond an insult" to his victims" → ""beyond an insult to Belfort's victims" (clarifies the "he")

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:00, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Controversies

• Italicize Variety and link to Variety (magazine)

 Done Chompy Ace 13:49, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• WL Friends of Animals

 Done Chompy Ace 13:50, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Comma after "Hollywood's use of animals"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• WL Malaysian Anti-Corruption Commission

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Comma after "by producer Riza Aziz"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "illicit monetary movements and in 2016 was" → "illicit monetary movements, and, in 2016, was"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• expand DOJ into "Department of Justice"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• A bit of a WP:REFBOMB after the DOJ quote. [94] is pretty much reporting on [96], so the former can be removed

 Done Removed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "At the ending of the film, Malaysian fugitive financier Jho Low was credited," → "Fugitive Malaysian financier Jho Low was credited at the end of the film"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "created more speculation" with regards to what, exactly?

 Done Removed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• move [100] to the end of the sentence.

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• The paragraph beginning "In January 2020" set off an Earwig red flag, even outside of the direct quote, and needs to be rewritten for close paraphrasing.

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• ""and psychopathic behavior."" → ""and psychopathic behavior"." per MOS:LQ

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "short lived" → "short-lived"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• WL Risk and Insurance Management Society

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• ""fraud is left unchecked."" → ""fraud is left unchecked"." per MOS:LQ

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• In an interview, Josh Greenstein, Chief Marketing Officer of Paramount Pictures during the film's release, he depicts how needs to be rewritten for clarity

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• ""about the world."" → ""about the world"." per MOS:LQ

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Last two sentences need a citation.

 Done Removed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Jordan Belfort's reception

• I think London Real should be italicized? It's a podcast and YT channel

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:02, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• "increasingly senseless and greedy crimes" needs a tweak for neutrality, or a direct quote from Belfort

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:02, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Accolades

• The Oscar and BAFTA nominations require citations

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:04, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Soundtrack

• Need a reference for the release date and the track listing. Try this or this.

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:14, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

References

• We Got This Covered is grossly unreliable (my friends in the comics industry hate it for all the unsubstantiated clickbaity rumors it peddles)

 Done Removed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• [6] is missing the first letter ("he" instead of "The")

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• [11] is a bare reference to an unreliable source (IMDb)

 Done per WP:IMDB Chompy Ace 13:03, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• [14] is also missing the first letter ("ow" instead of "How")

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• [16] and [19] are the same source

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• Change instances of "Deadline.com" to "Deadline Hollywood"

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• [26] and [27] are incomplete refs

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• In general, any publication that's currently .com should be altered to the publication name (ew.com → Entertainment Weekly, HollywoodReporter.com → The Hollywood Reporter, etc.)

 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• [60] is missing a publication

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• [63] is a bare link

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• [66] is missing a work/publication

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• [102] and [103] are also bare links

 Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

General comments

• Article is stable
• Pictures are good
• Earwig score is high but clearly a mirror. The one paragraph of concern is listed above

Final comments and verdict

Putting  On hold until all issues are fixed. Don't be afraid to reach out if you have any questions. Kncny11 ^(shoot) 00:31, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

@Kncny11: All of your suggestions and comments have been addressed (proof). Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 15:01, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Thank you for making those changes, Some Dude From North Carolina (and Chompy Ace, your contributions are not unnoticed!) Passing now. :) Kncny11 ^(shoot) 19:22, 24 March 2021 (UTC)