Talk:The X-Files season 7/GA1
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GA Review
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Reviewer: Grapple X (talk · contribs) 04:21, 7 May 2012 (UTC)
Dibs. I'll be reviewing this one shortly (Monday evening BST). GRAPPLE X 04:21, 7 May 2012 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Where did it all go so wrong?
- Is it reasonably well written?
- A. Prose quality:
- The second paragraph of the lead uses a few repetitive phrases ("long-running" twice and "arcs" three times). Could do with a bit of variety.
"This season would be the last to feature the old opening sequence for the series" -> I would used "original" instead of "old"; connect this sentence to the next one with "as"; and move it to a later lead paragraph.
" As such, the episode "Millennium" was written and produced." -> "as such" to "as a result".
"Season seven debuted with lower numbers than the previous season" -> clarify what the numbers are; I know they're viewing figures but a reader who doesn't look at a lot of TV articles might not.
"in order to ease his opportunity to find movie work" -> "in order to facilitate in work in films"
"Furthermore, the move to Los Angeles also meant a drastic price increase for the series." -> "Furthermore, the move to Los Angeles also meant a drastic increase in production costs."
"Davis approached Carter with his idea about The Smoking Man trying to seduce Scully with medical knowledge, who was intrigued." - Who was intrigued, Scully or Carter?
"Duchovny was eligible for an estimated 5 percent," -> "five percent", but clarify what that's five percent of.
"wanting to purse other parts of my career" -> Prusue, I assume? Unless it's a typo in the source.
There's a bit of a linking error in the "accolades" section there.
Drop "unique" from "Hungry"'s summary. It is unique but it sounds a bit like puffery.
"if he’s so lucky" -> "he is". Avoid contractions.
"Scully’s former kidnapper ("Irresistible" Season 2)" -> "Scully’s former kidnapper (seen in season two's "Irresistible")"
"After a young boy with cancer, whose parents don’t" -> "do not"
"a married man whom she had an affair with during medical school" -> "a married man with whom she had an affair during medical school"
Maybe reword "Hollywood A.D."'s blurb a little to clarify it's the X-Files, and not The X-Files, that the film's based on. I still hate that episode by the way.
"wheelchair-bound" -> as I found out from editing here, that's actually seen as a derogatory term now. I'd probably rephrase it to "wheelchair-using" or collapse "wheelchair-bound, mentally-impaired" to "handicapped".
- The second paragraph of the lead uses a few repetitive phrases ("long-running" twice and "arcs" three times). Could do with a bit of variety.
- B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
- MOS is fine.
- A. Prose quality:
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- It might be tidier to cite the points in the plot summary to the Shapiro book as the citations will be neater; but at the same time it's handy to have episodes cited as a frame of reference. Maybe pairing them (like what's done in X (The X-Files)) would be good, as it offers a secondary source on top of the primary episode source.
- A. References to sources:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- Do we need a paragraph for the plot of "En Ami"? I'd be more willing to leave it if it seemed more important but it's one of those episodes that could pass as a standalone rather than a major plot point. Maybe trim it down a little if you do keep it.
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Grand.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- Fine.
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
- Not a bother here; I like that double portrait one. Both of those are free so that's great.
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Just sticking this one on hold for now. It's good to see a few seasons getting the GA treatment, they're a pain in the hoop to do but they need done. GRAPPLE X 02:40, 8 May 2012 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail:
- OK, I believe I've addressed all the concerns. And you didn't like "Hollywood A.D."? Maybe it was a tad too reflexive.. and the dancing skeletons were stupid... and the dancing zombies. Pretty much anything in that episode that danced was stupid.--Gen. Quon (talk) 14:20, 8 May 2012 (UTC)
- Skinner in a bubble bath. Skinner. In a bubble bath. Arguably "Fight Club" was worse but there's something about seeing a man who went toe to toe with X in season two sitting in a bath sipping champagne that just sits weird. There's still worse out there though. Article looks good to go now, though. Passing it now; well done. GRAPPLE X 14:28, 9 May 2012 (UTC)
- I haven't seen about half of season nine. I just picked up the season the other day, but I don't want to ruin the series with it. :P --Gen. Quon (talk) 14:39, 9 May 2012 (UTC)
- "John Doe" is great, "Release" is also great but needs you to have seen the rest of the series first I guess. Apart from that it's pretty bad. There's some good guest appearances (James Remar and Burt Reynolds stand out) and a few ideas that might have worked if some of the old magic hadn't gone ("Underneath" could really have benefited from having someone like Morgan and Wong, Johannessen, or even Vince Gilligan writing it, for example). The super soldier stuff is certainly no worse than the whole Scully finds an African UFO and suddenly Mulder's a vegetable arc, but the baby definitely jumps the shark. Speaking of which, "Jump the Shark" is just unfair. GRAPPLE X 14:50, 9 May 2012 (UTC)
- I haven't seen about half of season nine. I just picked up the season the other day, but I don't want to ruin the series with it. :P --Gen. Quon (talk) 14:39, 9 May 2012 (UTC)
- Skinner in a bubble bath. Skinner. In a bubble bath. Arguably "Fight Club" was worse but there's something about seeing a man who went toe to toe with X in season two sitting in a bath sipping champagne that just sits weird. There's still worse out there though. Article looks good to go now, though. Passing it now; well done. GRAPPLE X 14:28, 9 May 2012 (UTC)
- OK, I believe I've addressed all the concerns. And you didn't like "Hollywood A.D."? Maybe it was a tad too reflexive.. and the dancing skeletons were stupid... and the dancing zombies. Pretty much anything in that episode that danced was stupid.--Gen. Quon (talk) 14:20, 8 May 2012 (UTC)