Talk:Thelma Carpenter (billiards player)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 13:33, 30 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 19:32, 5 November 2024 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments:

• I created her commonscat and added it to the article.
• "She met prominent snooker and billiards players including Joe Davis and Clark McConachy when" put commas as noted "She met prominent snooker and billiards players, including Joe Davis and Clark McConachy, when"
• "although he may have regretted this" Source is offline so I'll trust that it says that.
• "McConachy, who would become" change to "McConachy, who became"
• "When training, she would practise and play" changed to "When training, she practised and played"
• "helped with forcing and screw shots" What's forcing mean? Is there a link for that at Cue sports techniques or Glossary of cue sports terms?
• "controlling the amateur and professional English billiards and snooker" Snooker is mentioned earlier in the body so it should be linked there instead.
• "that no permissions would be granted where tournaments differentiated between men and women" What's a permission mean in this regard?
• "the WBA had affiliated to the Billiards and Snooker Control Council" sorry but I'm not sure what that means.
• "Carpenter accepted an invitation to play in the professional championship" is that the Women's Professional Billiards Championship?
• "in the Billiards final" Women's Professional Billiards Championship is linked here but that is linked earlier.
• Same for "The 1950 Billiards final"
• "once to Gardner in the Women's" write out and link her full name.
• "beat Gardner 3,120–2,518 to" unlink Gardner here after you do the above
• "1949 also saw Carpenter lose for the fourth time in the Snooker final" Women's Professional Snooker Championship is linked here but that's linked earlier.
• "A few days later, Carpenter won the Snooker Championship too" that is linked earlier
• This is probably picky but is there a source for the note that says "No contest was held between 1940 and 1947".
• In lead: "was an English player of English billiards and snooker player" remove player after snooker
• Is that image actually copyrighted? 1933 is kinda old.
• Some of the stuff like "Birmingham Gazette" in the reference section could probably be linked
• Couldn't find birth place or death place I presume?

Spot checks:

• "Big Breaks, Battles and Pneumonia: The Unsung Story of Thelma Carpenter's Glistening Cue-Sport Career". West of England Billiards and Snooker Foundation. 17 August 2019
  • The article says "She was educated at home and never attended school" but I can't seem to find that in the ref?
  • Article says "She started playing billiards in 1926" but I can't find that in the ref?
  • Article says "Carpenter's father, Brodie Carpenter, owned the Solent Cliffs Hotel in Bournemouth, which had two billiards rooms" I don't see that either.
  • Article says "She married Jimmy Seeor in 1939 and the following year gave birth to a son" Don't see that
  • Article says "He added that Carpenter's billiards academy for women, which she opened on 1 October 1934" I don't see the opening date in the ref.
  • Everything else for that ref looks good.

• "World Ladies Billiards Champions". World Billiards. 22 June 2015
  • Looks good.

• "Saturday Contrast: 4". BBC Programme Index. 19 December 1936
  • Looks good.

• "Billiards". BBC Programme Index. 19 July 1947
  • Looks good.

• "Nomination Billiards". BBC Programme Index. 19 December 1936
  • "and again the following year when her match against Harrison was broadcast" I don't see that in the ref?

Excellent research. Great article! ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 19:32, 5 November 2024 (UTC)