Talk:Theresienstadt family camp/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Auntieruth55 (talk · contribs) 15:16, 17 October 2018 (UTC)

I'll start this in a few days. auntieruth (talk) 15:16, 17 October 2018 (UTC)

@Catrìona: This is looking good.

1. sources look good!
2. nicely laid out, and thoroughly done!

I tightened the text, used more active verbs, especially associated with the Nazi actions, and fixed some grammatical and format issues. Please review edits and let me know if they work for you. I'll finish up the pictures later. auntieruth (talk) 16:47, 23 October 2018 (UTC)

@Catrìona: the last sentence of the *First Liquidation Section* shouldn't start with a number. Either write it out or reword the sentence. auntieruth (talk) 16:26, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

 Done Catrìona (talk) 18:01, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

• In update on the progress of this review? AIRcorn (talk) 22:31, 22 January 2019 (UTC)

I'll take over the review of this article, please stand by. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 21:12, 30 March 2019 (UTC)

Opening statement (Vami_IV)

In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use  Done,  Fixed,  Added,  Not done,  Doing..., or  Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. —Vami♜_IV♠ 21:14, 30 March 2019 (UTC)

I am reviewing this article as the Coordinator of WikiProject Germany. Full disclosure: I have previously reviewed a number of Buidhe's articles and would consider myself as being on good terms with her. —Vami♜_IV♠ 21:15, 30 March 2019 (UTC)

@Buidhe:

Miscellaneous

• Main infobox image's copyright status seems dubious. Assumptions are not good enough.
• Where applicable, please replace redlinks with Interlanguage links.

Background

• that deported Jews were not murdered. Would read better as "not being murdered." or "had been not murdered."

Conditions

• Brachmann was also a criminal prisoner Redundant.
• after work they had only an hour that they were allowed to spend with their families before the evening roll call. This is a little too wordy.

Children's barracks

• Block 31 The article has previously referred to individual barracks buildings as "barracks".
• A chorus rehearsed regularly; a children's opera was performed; and supplies were scrounged in order to decorate the walls of the barracks Replace the colons here with commas.

GA Progress

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

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