Talk:Thomas Carlyle/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Phlsph7 (talk · contribs) 09:51, 29 December 2022 (UTC)

I'll do this review. Unfortunately, this is a quick fail: there are too many unreferenced claims and paragraphs. I've added the corresponding templates to the text to highlight the problem. They should all be addressed before the next nomination.

A few other things that caught my eye:

• The article is very long. By my count, it has roughly 95kB of readable prose. For comparison, see WP:SIZERULE. There is no fixed rule here but this is a strong indication that it covers too many details, which should maybe be discussed in articles on more narrow subjects, see WP:SUMMARY.
• WP:EARWIG shows one potential copyright violation with [1] but this is an ebay advertisement so it's safe to assume that they copied from us.
• The text jumps between British (eg endeavours and honours) and American English (eg counselor and travelers). Most of it is in British English and given the topic, it should probably default to that.
• With this empirical basis, Carlyle conceived of a "new Mythus",[146] Natural Supernaturalism.: this is a one-sentence paragraph, consisting of 12 words. It should be merged into another paragraph.
• The glossary-section is long and consists entirely of quotes. It's probably better to rewrite this section in our own prose, see MOS:QUOTATIONS and WP:LONGQUOTE. I think many of the entries do not need to be mentioned, like "Clothes" or "Tailors".
• Thomas Carlyle (4 December 1795 – 5 February 1881) was a Scottish essayist, historian and philosopher.: add Oxford comma after "historian".
• A leading writer of the Victorian era, he exerted a profound influence on 19th-century art, literature and philosophy.: add Oxford comma after "literature".
• 1833 saw publication of the essays "Diderot" and "Count Cagliostro": add "the" before "publication".
• it was a popular success, and did much to revise Cromwell's standing in Britain.: remove the comma after "success"
• Carlyle visited Ireland in 1846 with Charles Gavan Duffy for a companion and guide,: replace "for" with "as"
• Awareness of the fraternal bond of mankind brings discovery of the "Divine Depth of Sorrow": add "the" before "discovery"
• A few cases of WP:OVERCITE:
  • G. K. Chesterton posited that "Out of [Carlyle] flows most of the philosophy of Nietzsche,"[262] a view held by many;[263][264][265][266]
  • More recently, figures associated with the Nouvelle Droite, the Neoreactionary movement, and the alt-right have claimed Carlyle as an influence on their approach to metapolitics.[310][311][312][313]
  • This section lists parodies of and references to Carlyle in literature.[355][356][357][358]

Phlsph7 (talk) 09:51, 29 December 2022 (UTC)

 Done

Sinopecynic (talk) 00:38, 31 December 2022 (UTC)