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- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Valereee (talk) 17:13, 6 July 2021 (UTC)
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- ... that Thomas J. Bray, an iron and steel magnate, died while getting ready to testify before Congress?Source:"Thomas J. Bray dies in his office", The New York Times, p. 23, 12 December 1933
ALT1:... that Thomas J. Bray wanted to canalize the local rivers? Source: Id.ALT2:... that iron and steel magnate Thomas J. Bray wanted to canalize the local rivers?- ALT3:... that iron and steel magnate Thomas J. Bray wanted to canalize the Beaver, Mahoning and Shenango rivers?
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iswas a pending AFD, whichwill be resolved soon.was closed as Keep Per the closer: "The result was keep. With the support of the original nominator, the consensus is to keep. (non-admin closure)". 5x expanded by 7&6=thirteen (talk) and Andrew Davidson (talk). Nominated by 7&6=thirteen (☎) 12:12, 27 June 2021 (UTC)
Hi 7&6=thirteen. There's no citation for the second paragraph of "early life and education". Also the article is a bit jumbled up: his death is mentioned towards the start of the "career" section and then again in the "death and legacy" section; I would suggest it sits better in the later section. For the hooks it seems strange to describe them as "local" rivers with no geographic context, maybe "Pennsylvanian rivers" is better? I don't think the statement "He was an influencer amongst the industrial leaders of the Mahoning River steel industry" in the lead is supported in the article. I don't quite make it a 5x expansion either (I count an increase from 778 to 3778 characters). Great save from AFD though so would be good to feature this in DYK - Dumelow (talk) 06:54, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
- User:Dumelow Expanded article beyond 5X, added the missing citation to paragraph 2, added ALT 3. Got rid of "influencer". Thanks for the review. 7&6=thirteen (☎) 12:39, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
Good stuff 7&6=thirteen. AGF on hook sourcing, which I presume is in the NYT article (I couldn't see Bray mentioned in the JSTOR article). I've struck the "local rivers" hooks, otherwise all good - Dumelow (talk) 13:00, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
