Talk:Tillinghast L'Hommedieu Huston/GA1

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Reviewer: Kncny11 (talk · contribs) 16:34, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be reviewing this article as part of the July 2021 good article nominations backlog drive! Any section that I've marked with a  Working tag means that I haven't finished leaving comments there, but you're free to begin making changes as soon as you see them! Kncny11 ^(shoot) 16:34, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• The nickname is not sourced or explained in the body
  • I took it out. – Muboshgu (talk) 21:05, 5 July 2021 (UTC)

Early life

• Add a "the" before Chesapeake and Ohio Railway
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 00:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
• Add some phrase like "to serve" after "engineers with expertise", to make it clear that they'd be in the war effort (as opposed to, say, the Rosie the Riveter types on the home front)
  • I expanded the sentence. – Muboshgu (talk) 20:44, 5 July 2021 (UTC)
• "Huston was commissioned as a captain. Huston was..." → "Huston was commissioned as a captain, and was"
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 00:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
• Is the $10 million contract in USD?
  • I believe so. It's a US source giving the dollar amount, though it does not explicitly say so. I'm marking it as USD in the article. – Muboshgu (talk) 20:15, 5 July 2021 (UTC)

New York Yankees

• Pipe "exhibitions" to exhibition game
  • Linked – Muboshgu (talk) 00:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
• "and other team owners adopted the strategy." → "a strategy later adopted by other team owners"
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 00:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
• Comma after "He served in France"
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 00:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
• "... as the Yankees' next manager. Huston was ..." → "... as the Yankees' next manager, and was ..."
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 00:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
• "Huston returned to the United States after spending 17 months overseas in January 1919." → "Huston returned to the United States in January 1919, after spending 17 months overseas."
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 00:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
• WL first instance of Red Sox
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 00:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
• "though they ultimately relented"
  • Added – Muboshgu (talk) 00:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
• I do feel that this section would benefit from 2 or 3 subheads to break up the length
  • Spit in two. – Muboshgu (talk) 20:11, 5 July 2021 (UTC)

Later life

• Three sentences in a row in the first paragraph begin with the word "He". If one or two can be rephrased so as not to do that, it'd break up the para a little better
  • I changed the second one to "Huston". – Muboshgu (talk) 00:37, 4 July 2021 (UTC)

Personal life

• When did he come to direct the VFW National Home, and when did he serve as president of the chamber of commerce?
  • Good questions. Regarding the VFW National Home, money from the gate receipts of the 1922 World Series was donated to the VFW through Huston's influence, and that money was used to start the VFW National Home. I've added that to the article. When did he direct the National Home? I'm not sure.
  • As for when he was president of the Brunswick chamber of commerce, I do not know exactly. It would seem to be in the mid-1930s. – Muboshgu (talk) 21:47, 5 July 2021 (UTC)

References

• All reliable sources
• Please add a location to "Time Union" in [4] – I believe it's the Albany one, but there are several papers called "Times Union" or "Times-Union"
  • It was the Brooklyn Times-Union, actually. – Muboshgu (talk) 20:42, 5 July 2021 (UTC)
• I am curious why The New York Times is the only journal to be linked in the references section
  • Probably a result of an unconscious bias towards the Old Grey Lady. I removed it. – Muboshgu (talk) 20:42, 5 July 2021 (UTC)

General comments

• The images are all PD or CC, and make sense within the context of the article
• That being said, they are all quite large, with some awkward sandwiching in the one under the "Early life" head, so if they could be shrunken, that would be fantastic
  • Images are sized down. Is that enough? – Muboshgu (talk) 00:36, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
• No evidence of edit warring, only one primary contributor
• Earwig score looks fantastic at 8.3%

Mostly very quick prose things. Putting on hold for now, and let me know if you have any questions. Kncny11 ^(shoot) 20:10, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

Kncny11, great, thanks! I'll ping you again when I have gotten through them. – Muboshgu (talk) 03:14, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

Kncny11, I have responded to all points. – Muboshgu (talk) 21:47, 5 July 2021 (UTC)

Thank you for making those changes, particularly finding some of the dates for his later life. The images look well-sized now, and everything else is in order, so I'm happy to pass! — GhostRiver 21:41, 8 July 2021 (UTC)

Thanks! – Muboshgu (talk) 22:03, 8 July 2021 (UTC)