Talk:Tomb Raider: Underworld/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 10:30, 8 September 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   I already see several issues in the lead. One is that "On 25 May 2009, it was announced" was not updated. There is too much content about the releases. The lead should summarize the most important parts of the text, but currently it doesn't. There is no "release" section. Gameplay section was not summarized in the lead. Downloadable content too.

 Done Rewrote the one section, removed unnecessary detail, summarized gameplay & DLC and added "release" section.--WWETrishMickiefan (talk) 15:52, 16 September 2012 (UTC)

1. In the Gameplay section you did not introduce the actual gameplay, eg just the differences from prior installments. What if others did not play those games?

 Done Removed comparisons to previous instalments, changed a bit of info, added screenshot.--WWETrishMickiefan (talk) 15:52, 16 September 2012 (UTC)

1. 2nd section of Music is unreferenced

 Done Removed unsourced material. Looked and found citation and reference links for others.--WWETrishMickiefan (talk) 15:52, 16 September 2012 (UTC)

1. Fix this and I will continue--Kürbis (✔) 10:22, 13 September 2012 (UTC)

   Wow, much better now. However, the plot is too large and should be trimmed. Three paragraphs will suffice; avoid too much in-game details and summarize the content.

 Done Plot shortened to 3 paragraphs.--WWETrishMickiefan (talk) 17:54, 30 September 2012 (UTC)

1. Is the Characters section needed? It is not very long and could be merged with the plot section.

 Done Removed this section. Characters merged into the plot section, with interwiki links.--WWETrishMickiefan (talk) 17:54, 30 September 2012 (UTC)

1. The Music section is a bit short. Try describing the recording, the musical style, etc. Something like in XIII (video game) :).

Currently trying to find reference links/source to improve section.

1. In the tracklist, normally prepositions such as "of" are written in lower case. Ensure the titles are correct.--Kürbis (✔) 17:17, 23 September 2012 (UTC)

 Done--WWETrishMickiefan (talk) 17:54, 30 September 2012 (UTC)

1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   Some references are incomplete

   Use a consistent style, eg there are at least three different formats of "Gamespot"

   Something like "Uk.pc.ign.com" can be just "IGN". Same with Gamespot and other

 Done --WWETrishMickiefan (talk) 19:40, 30 September 2012 (UTC)

1. References such as 51 have no publishers--Kürbis (✔) 17:17, 23 September 2012 (UTC)

 Done --WWETrishMickiefan (talk) 19:40, 30 September 2012 (UTC)

2. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

3. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

4. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

5. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Perhaps add screenshots

 Done

1. Overall: Good article

   Pass/Fail:

Thank you :)--WWETrishMickiefan (talk) 08:11, 4 October 2012 (UTC)

• Comment - The VGReviews box is dominated by two aggregators essentially saying the same thing, and yet the scores for GamesRadar, IGN and Nintendo Power, which you've quoted in the text - aren't listed. You list the PS2 Gamerankings score even though its based on 1 review. I would drop GameRankings altogether. The Orange link is broken, and is a terrible source, regardless of its reliability. - hahnchen 22:48, 16 September 2012 (UTC)
  •  Done Removed GameRankings section and Orange review. Added IGN, Nintendo Power and GamesRadar into the VGReviews box.--WWETrishMickiefan (talk) 19:44, 17 September 2012 (UTC)