Talk:Tomorrowland (film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 18:40, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments later in the week. Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?} 18:40, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Basic stuff and comments

The Optimist

• This section looks like it could be moved under production as a subsection after filming.

Would a rename to Other media work? Rusted AutoParts 14:14, 21 January 2021 (UTC)

Yes. Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?} 14:26, 21 January 2021 (UTC)

 Already done Chompy Ace 15:11, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

Soundtrack

• Move this section under production.

 Done Rusted AutoParts 14:13, 21 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• The BBFC citation isn't working for me.

 Fixed new link Chompy Ace 14:08, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• The Box Office Mojo reference should link to the film's title summary, not its domestic release.

 Done, fixed using {{cite BOM}} Chompy Ace 22:03, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Link the citation from The New York Times as either "url-access=limited" or "url-access=subscription". Additionally, I couldn't find any mentions of a genre in the archive, so I'm wondering what exactly is the purpose of the reference and if it can be replaced with something else.

 Done, NYT reference removed, replaced with primary genre Chompy Ace 15:01, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• No need for references in the lead about writers/actors/release date.

 Done Chompy Ace 15:04, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• The "press kit" reference after "five countries" isn't working for me.

 Fixed Chompy Ace 15:06, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• This reference and this reference don't mention anything about the "musical score".

 Done removed Chompy Ace 15:08, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Remove the comma after "box office bomb".

 Done Chompy Ace 14:03, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Mark all citations from The New York Times as either "url-access=limited" or "url-access=subscription".

 Done Chompy Ace 22:08, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• This reference says the marketing cost was $280 million, not $330 million.

 Already done by User:Rusted AutoParts. Chompy Ace 14:01, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "$120–140 million" → "$120–150 million" per this reference.

 Already done by User:Rusted AutoParts. Chompy Ace 14:01, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

Plot and cast

• The entire plot section is 736 words, failing WP:FILMPLOT.

Shaved to 689.  Done Rusted AutoParts 14:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)

• In the cast section, add a reference that says Hugo was one of the "Fathers of Science Fiction" and another about the "Hugo Awards".

 Done removed Chompy Ace 14:23, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Shouldn't George Clooney be credited before Britt Robertson?

 Already done by User:Rusted AutoParts. Chompy Ace 14:20, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

This wasn't changed... Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?} 02:24, 23 January 2021 (UTC)

 Done that is based on the credits order Chompy Ace 02:37, 23 January 2021 (UTC)

Production

Development

• In the quote box, remove the words "Bird said."

 Done, replaced with "[...]" Chompy Ace 14:25, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Link George Clooney, Hugh Laurie, and Britt Robertson.

 Done Chompy Ace 14:26, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Mark the reference after "developmental unit" as "url-access=limited".

 Done Chompy Ace 14:28, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• The citations after "unidentified metal object" and "many of its contents" aren't working; mark them as dead.

 Done Chompy Ace 14:29, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

Filming

• Distribute the first three references about filming.

 Done Chompy Ace 01:52, 23 January 2021 (UTC)

• This reference says filming began August 8.

 Fixed Chompy Ace 14:30, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Mark the reference after "Valencia" as being in Spanish, and add a "trans-title=" parameter.

 Done Chompy Ace 14:37, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

Music

• Move the only reference in this section to the end of the sentence it's in.

 Done Chompy Ace 15:12, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

Release

• "in theaters and IMAX. Tomorrowland was the first film" → "in theaters and IMAX, and was the first film"

 Done Chompy Ace 22:03, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

Home media

• The "behind-the-scenes featurettes" and "the Plus-Ultra animated short film" aren't mentioned in this reference.

 Done removed Chompy Ace 14:10, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Combine both paragraphs into one.

 Done Chompy Ace 15:09, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

Other media

• This reference says that "The Optimist" was launched on July 3, 2013.

 Fixed Chompy Ace 14:38, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• A reference is needed for the claim that "The Optimist" ended on August 11, 2013.

 Done added reference Chompy Ace 02:38, 23 January 2021 (UTC)

• I think it's better if this section becomes a subsection under release.

 Done Chompy Ace 15:12, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

Reception

Box office

• "$115.7 million" → "$115.6 million"

 Done Chompy Ace 14:36, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "$209.2 million" → "$209 million"

 Done Chompy Ace 14:36, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "between $120 and $140 million" → "between $120 and $150 million"

 Done Chompy Ace 14:36, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• This reference doesn't say anything about the film costing "$330 million to produce and market". Additionally, this reference says the marketing cost was actually $280 million.

 Done Chompy Ace 14:37, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• The references after "second week)" and "701 theaters" aren't working for me. Probably just an incorrect link input in the url parameter.

 Fixed Chompy Ace 15:29, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• The second reference after "$30.8 million", from Box Office Mojo", isn't really needed as it's covered in the first citation.

 Done removed Chompy Ace 21:51, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• The first references after "$30.8 million" and "$37.8 million in 2010" link to the same page.

 Already done per consistency of film-related articles Chompy Ace 22:09, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Distribute the four references after "Japan ($2.1 million)."

 Already done per consistency of film-related articles Chompy Ace 02:01, 23 January 2021 (UTC)

• No mention of "$9.7 million on its opening day" in this reference, or "$725,000 during its early Thursday night showings" in this one.

 Done removed Chompy Ace 13:59, 23 January 2021 (UTC)

Critical response

• "based on 294 reviews" → "based on 297 reviews"

 Done Chompy Ace 14:17, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• There should only be one reference to Rotten Tomatoes, not two.

 Done Chompy Ace 14:17, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Everything else looks good.

 Already done Chompy Ace 14:17, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

Accolades

• References are needed for each award ceremony/group.

 Done, with verdicts Chompy Ace 22:37, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Accolades sections look better with reference columns, so I suggest adding one.

 Done Chompy Ace 22:15, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

Other stuff

Images

• Improve the rationale of the film's poster (this non-free use rationale is recommended).

 Done Chompy Ace 21:47, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "a background in Tomorrowland" → "a background in the film."

 Done Chompy Ace 14:34, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

References

• The following websites should be italicized:

• Las Provincias
• Vulture
• USA Today

 Done Chompy Ace 22:05, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• The following publishers should not be italicized:

• British Board of Film Classification
• Box Office Mojo
• Collider
• NBC News
• Rotten Tomatoes
• Metacritic
• Teen Choice Awards

 Done Chompy Ace 22:42, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Change all uses of Deadline to Deadline Hollywood.

 Done Chompy Ace 23:18, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Change all uses of The Wrap and Thewrap.com to TheWrap.

 Done Chompy Ace 23:16, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Change all uses of Slashfilm.com and Slashfilm to /Film.

 Done Chompy Ace 23:15, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Try linking all websites/publishers used in citations.

 Done Chompy Ace 02:35, 23 January 2021 (UTC)

• Link D23.com to D23 (Disney)

 Done Chompy Ace 23:12, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Twitter.com" → "Twitter"

 Done Chompy Ace 22:55, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Slate Magazine" → "Slate" (also change the use of "Slate Magazine" in #Critical response).

 Done Chompy Ace 22:56, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Businesses Insider" → "Business Insider"

 Done Chompy Ace 22:59, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "CINEMABLEND" → "Cinemablend"

 Done Chompy Ace 22:59, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Link de Volkskrant

 Done Chompy Ace 22:44, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Wired.com" → "Wired" or "Wired.com"

 Done Chompy Ace 23:00, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Philly.com" → "The Philadelphia Inquirer" or "Philly.com"

 Done Chompy Ace 23:03, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Usatoday.com" → "USA Today"

 Done Chompy Ace 22:06, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Link Entropy to Entropy.

 Done Chompy Ace 22:46, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• Additionally, the Entropy reference, the Teen Choice Awards reference, and the British Board of Film Classification citation should not be in ALL CAPS.

 Done Chompy Ace 22:46, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Variety.com" → "Variety"

 Done Chompy Ace 22:47, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

External links

• Remove the Rotten Tomatoes external link per WP:ELRC.

 Done Chompy Ace 14:00, 22 January 2021 (UTC)

Overview

GAN table

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Notes

• @Rusted AutoParts: I have added my first set of suggestions for images, the infobox, lead, plot, and cast sections. Additionally, I will be moving into production and release later in the day. Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?} 14:01, 21 January 2021 (UTC)

• @Rusted AutoParts: I have added most of my main notes, but I will tackle the references shortly. Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?} 16:51, 21 January 2021 (UTC)

• @Rusted AutoParts: UPDATE: I just finished adding all of my notes. Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?} 18:18, 21 January 2021 (UTC)

Damn, Chompy moves fast lol. @Chompy Ace: thanks for the assistance, at my rate this would’ve probably been finished a week from now. Rusted AutoParts 14:10, 23 January 2021 (UTC)