Talk:Tracy Lawrence/GA1

Latest comment: 5 years ago by TenPoundHammer in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Toa Nidhiki05 (talk · contribs) 00:22, 1 June 2019 (UTC)Reply


Comments

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Alright, this has sat here long enough. I'm going to try and give this a good and thorough review. I've got a checklist down below to keep track of my review but I'll also add comments down below here. On first glance this definitely looks like a solid article. Toa Nidhiki05 00:22, 1 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

Prose

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  • Generally looks good! One issue I've noticed is in regards to numbering. Per MOS:NUMERAL, numbers from 0 to 9 should be spelled out, but from what I can tell almost all numerals are spelled out. By my count there are 12 instances (all of them used when denoting chart positions) where numerals under 0-9 need to be written out. I've already spared you the trouble of making the only other number issue (using "No." when the rest of the article uses "number"). Toa Nidhiki05 00:38, 1 June 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • @Toa Nidhiki05: Think I got them all. Let me know if I missed any. Ten Pound Hammer(What did I screw up now?) 01:01, 1 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

Images

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  • All images seem to be good and meet the free/fair use requirements. I would like to know if there are any more images that can be included, just to make things a little more interesting - there's a long wall of text between the lede and the first image. Even one more image somewhere could make things look a little nicer. This is just a recommendation, not a requirement, but is something I noticed.. Toa Nidhiki05 00:48, 1 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

Scope/Focus

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  • Scope and focus both seem good. Everything important is discussed from what I can tell but nothing goes into unneeded detail. Toa Nidhiki05 01:26, 1 June 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • I've found one fairly major scope/focus in in the lede, on second view: it only focuses on his career. At a minimum, it might be worth noting a little bit about his upbringing - what made him want to start singing, his very very early career, etc. Toa Nidhiki05 00:40, 2 June 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Most sources don't really say much more about his early life other than what I've already written, although I have tried to flesh it out a little more. Compare Kathy Mattea, also a GA, where the "early life" segment is about as short. It looks like he really did just go straight from "moved to Nashville" to "signed to a major label" within a year. Ten Pound Hammer(What did I screw up now?) 02:51, 2 June 2019 (UTC)Reply
@Toa Nidhiki05: Oh my bad, I missed the "in the lede" part of your statement. Ten Pound Hammer(What did I screw up now?) 03:23, 2 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

References/source check

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  • One immediate catch here: a lot of links to Newspapers.com. That's a very good resource to use, but each usage should have a |url-access=subscription tag to let the reader know it is a subscription service. By my count there are 12 citations that go to Newspapers.com and each should have the tag. Toa Nidhiki05 01:42, 1 June 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • AllMusic should not be italicized. All italicizations in sources should be changed (this can be done by changing from work=Allmusic to publisher=Allmusic). This should also be changed in the text body as well. Toa Nidhiki05 01:56, 1 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

Attribution and dates (sorry this stuff is boring):

  • Citation 5 (People) should include the date of publication.
    Citation 8 (MusicRow) should attribute the author and include the date of publication.
    Citation 9 (Allmusic) should attribute the author.
    Citation 10 (Allmusic) should attribute the author.
    Citation 14 (Taste of Country) should attribute the author and include the date of publication.
    Citation 17 (Radio and Records) should attribute the author.
    Citation 19 (Radio and Records) should attribute the author.
    Citation 20 (Allmusic) should attribute the author.
    Citation 32 (Country Standard Time) should attribute the author.
    Citation 33 (Allmusic) should attribute the author.
    Citation 37 (Allmusic) should attribute the author.
    Citation 40 (Allmusic) should attribute the author.
    Citation 41 (Country Standard Time) should attribute the author.
    Citation 55 (Country Standard Time) should attribute the author.
    Citation 56 (Billboard) should attribute the author.
    Citation 60 (Roughstock) should attribute the author.
    Citation 62 (Allmusic) should attribute the author.
    Citation 65 (Tuscon.com) should attribute the author.
    Citation 75 (Allmusic) should attribute the author.
    Citation 76 (The Boot) should attribute the author.
    Citation 85 (One Country) should have the publication date and the author attributed.
    Citation 89 (The Tennessean) should attribute the author.
    Think I got all of these now. A couple of the Country Standard Time sources don't seem to have bylines, but I think I got everything else.
    I'll give another check tomorrow to make sure but it looks good right now. Toa Nidhiki05 03:17, 2 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

Specific souring issues:

  • I'm not sure how citation 4 relates to the claim made in the personal life section (that the charges against him were cleared). I assume source 18 covers that, but source 4 doesn't mention it from what I can tell. Toa Nidhiki05 01:27, 2 June 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • That was a misplacement. Fixed.
  • Citation 93 does not appear to meet the claim made. It links to a list of articles and I see no mention of Lawrence's second daughter or her birth. Toa Nidhiki05

List

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Conclusion

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All the issues I've mentioned appear to have been fixed. The prose looks fine to me - I might make a few minor changes myself later - but I don't see anything major enough to warrant a discussion here. Since all this seems to be addressed, I'm going to go ahead and pass the article. Toa Nidhiki05 03:20, 2 June 2019 (UTC)Reply