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I fixed some, but not all, of my concerns with this edit. Feel free to make changes or object to them.
Checked over the fixes, though I objected to "faded into the ambient environment" being changed into "fading the ambient environment" which doesn't make sense to me. TheAustinMan(Talk·Works)20:24, 6 July 2014 (UTC)Reply
"dissipated into a remnant disturbance" is redundant.
"Additional rainfall in Mexico after Arlene became a tropical cyclone severely impacted" → "After Arlene became a tropical cyclone, rainfall in Mexico inundated"
"Rainfall from Arlene interacted with a passing cold front to produce showers further northeast" – this seems to imply that the rainfall itself (i.e., raindrops) interacted with the cold front. Reword?
"Despite developing into a tropical cyclone" – the "despite" is strange here, and the sentence (or paragraph) could probably be reworded to remove it easily.
"after as many as 4,000 homes were flooded, impacting roughly 10,000 people" – make sure that "impacting" refers to the homes, not the emergency plans (though both are true by extension)
Done - Reworded.
"Arlene tracked over several offshore oil platforms as it tracked" – scratch one of the "tracked"s
Done - Exchanged one of the tracked for passed
"along Padre Island, breaching sections of the barrier island" – er, but, Padre Island is a barrier island. Reword?
"losses to... for... of" – please just pick one. :P
Done - Reworded
"Similar impacts occurred in the Corpus Christi area" – impacts as in deploying boats? (Read the previous sentence.) :P