Talk:Tropical Storm Arlene (2011)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC) This article is in good shape. However, my concerns are:

• Better opener. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
• "Originating from an Atlantic tropical wave, the precursor disturbance crossed the Yucatán Peninsula before emerging into the Bay of Campeche over warm waters." delink Atlatnic, major term per WP:OVERLINKING. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
• "and on June 30 Arlene " comma before "Arlene". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

Done. STO12 (talk) 04:48, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

• Why is there a source in the lead? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

Done. STO12 (talk) 17:00, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

• The MH is really good; however, it needs to be updated via TCR. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
• " Throughout the country, Arlene resulted in 22 confirmed fatalities and left one person missing." source? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
• "[28] In the wake of Arlene, one fatality was confirmed in Chiapas due to the effects of the storm.[1]" redundancy, either the first part or the last part should be removed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
• Parts of the impact could use some copyediting. For example, "They were both extended shortly after" sounds weird. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
• "Prior to impact, the IMSS activated a contingency plan for risk zones in the states of Veracruz and Tamaulipas." IMO "Prior to impact seems odd. In addition, spell out IMSS on it's first usage per MOS. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
• "Damage from the storm surmounted Mex$67 million (US$5.8 million) in Tamaulipas.[50]" wtf, what does "Mex" mean. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

Remember, I'm not the person who created the article, let alone add that. I also don't really appreciate foul language on this review, can you tone the level down a bit? The "Mex" is trying to point out Arlene's total in Mexican Currency. I'll change it. STO12 (talk) 16:49, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

I know. Tell me when you have changed it. Thanks. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:58, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

Done. STO12 (talk) 16:55, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

• "Swollen rivers in El Arenal and Huejutla drowned two people, who were later confirmed dead.[52] In the wake of the disaster, the government of Hidalgo allocated a total Mex$17 million (US$1.45 million) in order to initiate rehabilitation work.[53] " see above. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

Done. STO12 (talk) 16:55, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

• any aftermath? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
• Are the links on the talk page used in the article? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
• Why is Stan linked in the See also? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}

Done. STO12 (talk) 16:57, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

• Swamp the 2011 AHS link with a Timeline of the 2011 Atlantic hurricane season link. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

Done. STO12 (talk) 16:58, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

• Refs 47 and 58 use Staff Writer YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}

In better shape than Harvey, but still some work needed. It's close though. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

I have fixed the issues not addressed above. Please pass/fail or reply speedily as this review has been open way longer than it should have been. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 17:34, 24 November 2012 (UTC)

Meh, I'm used to the days of no GAN review limits, but I am passing this article. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:34, 24 November 2012 (UTC)