Talk:Tropical Storm Beryl (2012)/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by 12george1 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 23:48, 19 December 2012 (UTC)Reply

  • "Beryl developed on May 26 from a low-pressure system near the East Coast of the United States." - Can you be more specific about where? Like offshore North/South Carolina.
  • "storm's center became more moist and the system began" - Maybe you can say "moister" instead of "more moister".
  • "It is possible, however, that Beryl briefly reached hurricane intensity early in the evening" - Switch to "However, it is possible that Beryl briefly reached hurricane intensity early in the evening".
  • This is probably beyond your control, but why does the rainfall map have some discrepancies compared to the text in the article? For example, "9.7 in (250 mm) [fell] at Miami International Airport".
  • Why is there some preparations from Georgia and South Carolina in the Florida section?
  • No title for reference #47?
  • Alright, I am going to pass this article. Great job, --12george1 (talk) 04:44, 23 December 2012 (UTC)Reply