Talk:Tropical Storm Karen (2019)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Destroyeraa (talk · contribs) 03:17, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• was a weak tropical storm - Link tropical cyclone to tropical storm

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 15:03, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

• Link tropical cyclone naming to named storm

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 15:03, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

• Link tropical wave

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 15:03, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

• Link Tropical Atlantic

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 15:03, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

• However, just 12 hours later, Karen re-intensified into a tropical storm and entered the central Atlantic, early the next day. Remove "early the next day"

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 15:03, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

• Karen began to degrade on September 27 when it weakened into a tropical depression before degenerating into a surface trough, later that day. Why did it degrade? Wind shear? Also, split the sentence into two.  DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 15:03, 31 December 2020 (UTC) ~ Destroyer🌀🌀 03:17, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

Met history

• The wave was accompanied by large area of showers and thunderstorms as it moved over the Cabo Verde Islands. → "The wave was accompanied by a large area of convection, or showers and thunderstorms, as it moved over the Cabo Verde Islands." Add and link atmospheric convection because you use it further on

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 20:41, 7 January 2021 (UTC)

• The National Hurricane Center (NHC) began to monitor the system on September 18, while it was over the tropical Atlantic, for tropical cyclone formation. → "The National Hurricane Center (NHC) began to monitor the system for tropical cyclogenesis on September 18." Saying "while it was over the tropical Atlantic" is redundant.

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 14:27, 8 January 2021 (UTC)

• Link area of low pressure

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 20:41, 7 January 2021 (UTC)

• Soon after, Karen passed just north of Tobago How far north? If you can't find the exact number, it's ok. Also, when? "Soon after" is a bit ambiguous.

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 15:18, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

• Link wind shear to vertical wind shear.

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 20:41, 7 January 2021 (UTC)

• Although just a few hours later, thunderstorm activity began to flourish over the storm’s center.[1] At 6:00 UTC that day, Karen re-attained tropical storm status while located roughly 90 miles (145 km) southwest of St. Croix.[7] Next, At 6:00 UTC that day - what day?
  • @Robloxsupersuperhappyface: Sorry...no grammar mistake. At 6:00 UTC that day - You should mention the date more in the met history. ~ Destroyeraa🌀🇺🇸 16:06, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 17:54, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

• Nothing about it passing near Puerto Rico and the Virgin Islands?

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 15:25, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

• Later that day, Karen entered the central Atlantic, where dry air and wind shear began to affect the storm. Cut off where dry air and wind shear began to affect the storm.

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 14:33, 8 January 2021 (UTC)

• Regarding the above, change Although, the weakening was short-lived as convection developed over Karen’s center.

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 20:41, 7 January 2021 (UTC)

Preps and Impact

• No government shutdowns occurred due to the storm. This is unnecessary. Usually, we say what happened, not what didn't happen. Are government shutdowns regular in Trinidad and Tobago?

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 17:38, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

• Some of the worst impacts in the country were located in Tobago.[27] This should be moved up before A road in Tobago was littered with downed trees and utility poles.[25].

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 17:38, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

• All were discontinued by 9:00 UTC on September 25. Add "after the storm passed" after "September 25."
• 67 shelters were opened across the island. → "Across the island, the government opened 67 shelters." Don't start sentences with numbers.

 Done

• Put In Coamo, a bridge was swept away, isolating 15 families.[44] after Karen dropped a peak precipitation amount of 5 inches (127 mm) in Coamo.[39]. For example, "Karen dropped a peak precipitation amount of 5 inches (127 mm) in Coamo. In that down, a bridge was swept away, isolating 15 families."

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 17:48, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

• In the territory, 217 people were displaced by the storm. → In the territory, a total of 217 people were displaced by the storm.

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 17:48, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

• When Karen formed on September 22, a Tropical Storm Warning was issued for Grenada and Saint Vincent and the Grenadines. Change "a Tropical Storm Warning was issued" to "Tropical Storm Warnings were issued."

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 17:51, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

• Karen caused tropical storm conditions in Grenada where a Flood and Landslide warning was issued. → "Karen caused tropical storm conditions in Grenada, where Flood and Landslide warnings were issued."

 DoneRobloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 17:51, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

That's all. ~ Destroyeraa🌀🇺🇸 16:06, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

Comment

• @Robloxsupersuperhappyface: Remember to sign your username after each of your responses, so other people can tell who the editors involved in the GA process were. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 08:07, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

Question

@Destroyeraa:, the sentence “However, just 12 hours later, Karen re-intensified into a tropical storm and entered the central Atlantic, early the next day.” Those were actually two different events so I split the sentence. Is that ok? Robloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 15:07, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

Yes, I think that's okay. 🐔 Chicdat  ^{Bawk to me!} 13:18, 1 January 2021 (UTC)

Another Question

@Destroyeraa:, I’ve ran “Although just a few hours later, thunderstorm activity began to flourish over the storm’s center. At 6:00 UTC that day, Karen re-attained tropical storm status while located roughly 90 miles (145 km) southwest of St. Croix.”, through a few grammar checkers and found nothing wrong with it. So what do you think needs changes?Robloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 15:08, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

@Destroyeraa:, so I have finished all these. Is there anything else you think needs changes? Thanks!Robloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 19:21, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

Final

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

@Robloxsupersuperhappyface: After doing some source spotchecks, I am going to pass this. Congratulations on your first GA! ~ Destroyeraa🌀🇺🇸 19:36, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

@Destroyeraa:, OMG thank you so so much!!!Robloxsupersuperhappyface (talk) 19:37, 11 January 2021 (UTC)