Talk:Typhoon Choi-wan (2009)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:45, 8 January 2010 (UTC) Overall this article is good, though I did find a few concerns:

• The first paragraph is quite long; split it.
• The first sentence of the lead should explain what it is, exactly. It just dives right into the information about the typhoon.
• "Later that day the island of Agrihan was placed under a Tropical Storm Watch, before early the next day along with Tinian and Saipan, the tropical storm watches were upgraded to a Typhoon watch" I see what you're saying, but confusing as written. Reword.
• Define "navtex area".
• I gave the article a copyedit; read through again and make sure there's no other grammatical/spelling/punctuation errors. Especially double check comma usage, as I found many problems with that.

I'll put the article on hold, and will pass it when this is fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:45, 8 January 2010 (UTC)

I've gotten most of the issues with the article. I have yet to give the meteorological history a good read through due to lack of time. I should be able to polish it up later today. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:32, 8 January 2010 (UTC)

Since the other issues are done, and most of the article at least has been copyedited (caught a typo in the ce, lol), I am willing to pass the article now as it is, though you're certainly welcome to do a bit more copyediting on it if you find anything else. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:21, 10 January 2010 (UTC)