Talk:USS Kearsarge (BB-5)/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Inkbug in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 06:46, 23 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 06:46, 23 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

  • Preliminary comment: Everything in the infobox needs to be either cited or, preferably, described with citations. See SMS Monarch for one possible model for this.
  Done Inkbug (talk) 10:53, 28 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Ships are generally referred to as she, not it.
  Done Inkbug (talk) 11:00, 28 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
Using "she" all the time is monotonous; I use a mixture of the ship's name, "the ship" and "she" in my articles to keep the reader from falling asleep.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:56, 30 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
I hope it is better now. Inkbug (talk) 18:22, 30 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Use of a gallery is generally discouraged, try to integrate some of those pictures into the body of the article.
  Done Inkbug (talk) 11:24, 28 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Strongly recommend that you consult: Reilly, John C.; Scheina, Robert L. (1980). American Battleships 1896–1923: Predreadnought Design and Construction. Annapolis, MD: Naval Institute Press. ISBN 0-87021-524-8. More once you've had a chance to work on these issues.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:13, 28 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for all of the comments. I don't have the book, and I don't have access to a library with it. All I can see is small previews from Google Books, but I'll try to see what I can find. Thanks! Inkbug (talk) 11:24, 28 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
You're in luck, I have a copy. Email me and I'll send scans of the relevant pages.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:56, 30 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
I sent you an email. Inkbug (talk) 18:22, 30 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
I received the email – thanks so much! I'll try to incorporate as much as I can from it, although specific pointers will be helpful. Thanks again, Inkbug (talk) 20:26, 30 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
Glad you got it; have no fear that I won't offer as many pointers as you need. Just remember that my Monarch article, or any FA-class ship articles are very handy to borrow text from if you do a close reading of them. Copy, paste and adjust as needed is a philosophy that I've followed my whole time on Wiki.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:56, 30 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
I've gone through Reilly & Scheina. It will be more useful when I work on the Kearsarge-class article, but I've incorporated what I can into this article. Anything else that I should add or fix? Inkbug (talk) 11:40, 5 February 2013 (UTC)Reply
I think I have addressed all of the issues raised. Inkbug (talk) 17:34, 10 February 2013 (UTC)Reply