Talk:USS New Mexico (BB-40)/GA1
Latest comment: 9 years ago by Parsecboy in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Parsecboy (talk · contribs) 13:44, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- Much of the article is still a direct copy of DANFS. What' worse is that the text isn't even attributed to DANFS - this is plagiarism and completely unacceptable.
- Still issues with close paraphrasing - see for instance While approaching her berth in Hagushi anchorage just after sunset on 12 May, New Mexico was attacked by two kamikazes, which is rather close to While she was approaching her berth in the Hagushi anchorage, just after sunset on 12 May, she was attacked by two kamikazes
- Several duplicate links Done
- De-bold the "Battle of Newark Bay" in the lead or the body Done
- Fixed this myself.
- "had a turbo-electric transmission" Done
- Condense the short 2- and 3-sentence paragraphs - there's no reason to have the prose chopped up like that. Done
- Be consistent in your linking - for example, why is Attu linked and not Kiska? Done
- Also make sure you link obvious other topics, like Aleutian Islands Campaign and W. John Kenney - also fix the link for Kavieng Done
- When the invasion was underway, which was 20 November... - this is awkward Done
- Make sure your refs are in proper order - for example, the bundled refs "[15][4]" should be reversed. Done
- No need to italicize kamikaze, the word is common in English. Done
- No need to split up the references by type, especially when there are only 1 or 2 per type apart from the books. Done
- Much of the article is still a direct copy of DANFS. What' worse is that the text isn't even attributed to DANFS - this is plagiarism and completely unacceptable.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- Please choose a single ref format and standardize - either short names in the citations or full references, but not both. Done
- Have a look at Rohwer's Chronology of the War at Sea for further info on WWII operations Done
- Ditto for Nofi's To Train The Fleet For War for stuff on interwar training Done
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- Please add a description section, as in USS Michigan (BB-27) - this is a standard expectation. Done
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- The lead and 3rd image have dead source links Done
- Why is the last image forced so large? Done
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail: