Talk:USS Solomons/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Stikkyy in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:54, 5 September 2021 (UTC)Reply


Comments

  • Feels that the lead is a little light for this article, consider beefing up the existing para.
  • "and the amount of Bofors" the number of
  • "Washington under" comma after Washington.
  • "under lend-lease" our article seems to call this Lend-Lease, a formal title for that policy.
  • "Navy.. As a " one too many full stops.
  • Check image captions. They mainly seem to be fragments, not sentences, so they don't need a full stop.
  • "Virginia on 16" comma after Virginia.
  • "without much luck" not particularly encyclopedic tone.
  • "BuNo 24295" what is that?
  • "Lt. Cdr. H." this rank is abbreviated, no others seem to be.
  • What is LTJG?
  • And FKpt. ?
  • "Martin PBM Mariner flying boat that" flying boat is overlinked.
  • "External links" fix font size.

That's all I have right now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:38, 6 September 2021 (UTC)Reply