Talk:Un-American Graffiti/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 18:03, 27 January 2016 (UTC)

Grabbing this for a review as well. Miyagawa (talk) 18:03, 27 January 2016 (UTC)

• Plot section doesn't include the typical actor in brackets format following the first appearance of the character.
• "She stakes out the restaurant before the owner’s husband comes out and berates her to leave." - This reads as if it is referencing the owner's wife from the previous sentence.
• "appear and shoot paintballs at the three." - The previous sentence (in the above bullet) makes it sounds as if there would be only two people there.
• Production - Adam Rose doesn't have a closing bracket.
• Production - You've got Postgame Mortem linked twice in the same section.
• IGN's "good" quote needs an immediate citation.
• Reviews - You've got cliché linked on the second occurrence.
• "even Veronica pointing out this cliché didn't make it less so." - needs a cite
• "a breath of fresh air," - same
• Glad you mentioned the Islamophobia part, I was wondering if that was worth linking to from within the plot, but I'm satisfied with it here.
• Enrico Colantoni shouldn't be linked to in the image caption as he's already linked to in the article body.

• @Johanna: Other than that, I think it's good to go. Nice job. Shame that FBI season never panned out, I've seen the trailer and it would have been good - especially since that sort of procedural seems to be popular. Miyagawa (talk) 11:36, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

• @Miyagawa: Yeah, I know, but I would have been happy with it returning in any form! :) Anyways, I have responded to your comments, and once again, thank you for the review. Johanna^{(talk to me!)} 16:32, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

• @Johanna: Great, happy to promote. Miyagawa (talk) 16:38, 31 January 2016 (UTC)