Talk:Unbroken (Stan Walker song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Novice7 (talk) 04:47, 3 July 2011 (UTC)

The article's lead is a bit short. Can you expand it to include a sentence about the music video, promotion etc? At present, Lead looks okay. Waiting for expansion.

Background and composition

• "Unbroken" was written and produced by OneRepublic leader Ryan Tedder, who was behind hits such as Beyoncé Knowles' "Halo" and Leona Lewis' "Bleeding Love". – behind "hits"? Also, it would be nice if you could include the year of release of these songs.
• "Unbroken" was recorded at Artisan Studios in Birmingham, England, while Phil Tan mixed the record at Soapbox Studios, Atlanta, Georgia.[2] – "while" doesn't fit the sentence. Try "and" (recording and mixing can't take place simultaneously)
• It is a privilege for me to record a song by the guy who wrote "Halo" for Beyoncé and "Bleeding Love" for Leona. He's the man, one of the best songwriters and producers in the world. I am so blessed." – Quotes within quotes...

Will continue soon... Novice7 (talk) 04:58, 8 July 2011 (UTC)

• Is the sample needed? I mean, it isn't illustrating anything at the moment.

• It illustrates its "piano-driven pop music ballad"-ness, its "repetitive chorus" and gives a sample of the lyrics, as described in Walker's quote. Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:38, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

Then, can you include that on the Fair use rationale? Novice7 (talk) 10:03, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

Yup done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 10:12, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

Release and promotion

• I suggest merging Release with Reception and Promotion with Music video, as I feel it would read and look better.
• A digital extended play (EP) was released in several countries on 20 April 2010 – I can see only one reference.

• I added another ref, but it would be kinda weird to add a ref for every country. Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:38, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

• it features an Israel remix and the a capella version. – it features a remix by singer Israel and the a capella version?

Reception

• "Unbroken" debuted on the New Zealand Singles Chart at number twenty-nine on 19 April 2010. – add a source.
• All the NZ chart info is referenced by one cite. Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:38, 9 July 2011 (UTC)
• On 1 August 2010 the Recording Industry Association of New Zealand (RIANZ) certified "Unbroken" gold, marking the sale of 7,500 copies.[13] – copies in New Zealand. Also, is certification done on the basis of sales in NZ?
• Done. Yup, sales. Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:38, 9 July 2011 (UTC)
• In August 2010 the song fell out of the ARIA Singles Chart, having spent seventeen non-consecutive weeks on the chart. – unclear (August 2010). Also, the given source states September?

Music video

• Is the Youtube account official? Otherwise, remove it.

That's all. Short yet good article. Novice7 (talk) 04:49, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

• All are either replied to or done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:38, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

Passing... Novice7 (talk) 10:17, 9 July 2011 (UTC)