Talk:Unfaithful (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Jivesh boodhun (talk · contribs) 12:58, 23 January 2012 (UTC)

Lead

• Generally well written. I did some minor tweaks. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:14, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

Infobox

• Link both Tor Erik Hermansen, Mikkel S. Eriksen under Stargate and unlink the producer.

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

Background and release

• by American singer and songwriter - already in lead

  Removed— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• which Ne-Yo also wrote - remove also

  Removed— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• The song was produced by Stargate[4] and recorded at Battery and Avatar Studios in New York City, Loft Recording Studios in Bronxville and Digital Insight Recording Studios in Las Vegas.[5] The song was mixed by Phil Tan and Makeba Ridick provided vocal production.[5] - Close repetition of The song

• Changed— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• The song was released as the second single from A Girl like Me, only after the US number-one single "SOS". The song was released to digital outlets in Canada on June 20. 2006.[6] - Again

• Changed— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• Overall: It's good at GA level but if yo want to take it to FA (it has got potential), you will need to paraphrase the quotes. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:14, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• I will think about it, but its a good idea. — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

Music and lyrics

• According to the sheet music published by Universal Music Publishing Group at Musicnotes.com, it is composed in the key of G minor and set in common time with a slow feeling groove. - was composed + link key, common time and groove

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• from the low note of F3 to C5 - from the low note of F3 to the high note of C5

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• by the works - work

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• In the beginning, the song's structure built around piano as the only instrument; the percussion and strings was added late - Something is missing.

• was, right?— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• According to Brandee J. Tecson of MTV - MTV or MTV News?

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• Unlink ballad

  Removed — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• In an interview with MTV - In an interview for the same publication

• Changed— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• "we - "We

• Changed — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• In another interview with NewsDay - for

• Changed — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• Quentin B. Huff of PopMatters criticized the song's lyrics and described them as well-intentioned but "overboard with melodrama" and "devoid of remorse".[12] Regarding Rihanna's vocals in the song, Bill Lamb of About.com commented that they are not particularly strong and in places sound thin and reedy.[17] - Won't this fit in reception?

• I removed Bill Lamb's part. But I think Quentin one should stay, because he comments on the lyrics. Can you re-format the first sentence? — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

Reception and accolades

• In a review of A Girl like Me - Unnecessary

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• While reviewing the single - Again

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• , in a review of the album, - Same

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• Celia San Miguel from Vibe magazine, in a review of the album, praised "Unfaithful" and the other ballads on it, stating that the ballads give Rihanna a "new found charisma, solid vocal range and her ability to channel deep-rooted emotions with ease". - Celia San Miguel from Vibe magazine praised "Unfaithful", stating that it gives Rihanna a "new found charisma, solid vocal range and her ability to channel deep-rooted emotions with ease".

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• Why is Billboard not lined?

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• A reviewer from Billboard magazine likened the song to Beyoncé Knowles' works and concluded that the song reveals Rihanna as a "young vocalist growing into her own" - Repetitive use of the words the song + work should be singular

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• Knowles's - I see an extra "s"

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• In 2011, Billboard - Billboard magazine for consistency

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• at number nine on its list of the Top 10 Singles of the Year - which year?

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• Top 100 Pop Songs of 2006 commenting "It's all about that one word...murderer." - Top 100 Pop Songs of 2006, commenting, "It's all about that one word...murderer."

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

Chart performance

• Never start with The song

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• in the United States. - US

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• If you say US Hot Dance Club Songs chart - then also put chart after the Hot 100 one

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• were sold - Not sold but shipped

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• The next week - The next week,

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• by International Federation of the Phonographic Industry - by the International Federation of the Phonographic Industry (IFPI)

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• Again, not selling but shipping

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

• on July 22, 2006 and the next week - on July 22, 2006, and the next week,

   Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

Music video

• Good. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:05, 26 January 2012 (UTC)

Live performances

• I can't at that wig :P
• where she won the award for Best R&B Act - Necessary?
• I did some tweaks here and in he video section as well.
• Consider reading this section and remove unnecessary details. The prose is in fact good but this section is over-detailed. We do not need to know about so many other songs. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:05, 26 January 2012 (UTC)

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 15:40, 26 January 2012 (UTC)

Other sections look good. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12

15, 26 January 2012 (UTC)

References

• FN 16 Use cite news and publisher should be Cablevision
• FN 17 Link The New York Times Company
• FN 19 Unlink The New York Times Company
• FN 21 Use cite web
• FN 22 Link The Washington Post Company
• FN 24 Link Buzz Media
• FN 35. Jam! should not be in italics. The publisher is Sun Media
• FN 69. Check for consistency
• FN 71. Spot the error
• FN 73 Link Penticton Herald
• FN 75 You will now have to unlink Sun Media
• FN 76 publisher is The Star Tribune Company
• FN 84 Is the formatting correct?

Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:28, 26 January 2012 (UTC)

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 15:40, 26 January 2012 (UTC)

As it stands now

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:28, 26 January 2012 (UTC)

Passing now. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 15:44, 26 January 2012 (UTC)