Talk:University of Mississippi/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by HAL333 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 10:01, 17 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

  • Hello HAL333, I will be taking up the review for this article and will present it to you shortly. I hope my feedback will be helpful to you and that I can learn something new in the process. Tayi Arajakate Talk 10:01, 17 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Comments

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  • In the section on "Integration", Paul B. Johnson Jr. is wikilinked twice, the full name is also unnecessary for a second time, Johnson Jr. should suffice. Lieutenant governor is un-capitalised the first time and capitalised the second time, the second mention doesn't seem necessary. As far as I'm aware titles should also be capitalised whenever they come before the name of a person.
Good catch. ~ HAL333 14:08, 22 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "With the arrival of night and far-right former Major General Edwin Walker, a mob before the Lyceum became violent." This sentence isn't very clear, I would suggest rephrasing.
Rephrased. Does that work? ~ HAL333 16:59, 22 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
That reads a lot better so yes, it does. Tayi Arajakate Talk 17:19, 22 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Near the end, the section on oxford campus shifts to referring to the university as Ole Miss. Since this occurs right after the mention of the Ole Miss Union building, I would recommend not referring to the university by its byname as it can sound a bit confusing.
I increased usage so it doesn't pop out as much. ~ HAL333 17:19, 22 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Could the section on divisions of the university elaborate a bit on the 15 schools? For example, it doesn't even mention 5 of them.
Oops. I missed those. They are in the table now. ~ HAL333 17:14, 22 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • I think the section on athletics needs a line after the first one mentioning the number of men's and women's teams Ole Miss Rebels has and in which sports.
It already does. ~ HAL333 14:02, 22 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
HAL333, right did not realise that the line referred to the rebels. In that case, I think the reference for the two sentences could be improved with a secondary source if possible. Tayi Arajakate Talk 14:11, 22 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "This handbook is still given to students today. I would suggest rephrasing this sentence since it uses a relative time reference.
Done. ~ HAL333 14:10, 22 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
The line currently says, "As of 2021, this handbook is still given to students today." The "today" should be removed. Tayi Arajakate Talk 14:16, 22 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Never mind, I fixed it myself. It was a minor issues anyways. Tayi Arajakate Talk 14:28, 22 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "The Daily Mississippian is still in print today." This line uses a relative time reference as well and seems unnecessary since the next line is in the present tense anyways.
Good point. Removed. ~ HAL333 14:03, 22 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Assessment

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  1. Comprehension: The article is well written.
  2.   Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (prose) The prose is clear, concise and understandable.   Pass
    (b) (MoS) The article is compliant with the manual of style.   Pass
  3. Verifiability: The article is verifiable.
  4.   Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (references) The article has a list of references and in-line citations for all its contents.   Pass
    (b) (citations to reliable sources) Sources used are reliable.   Pass
    (c) (original research) No original research found.   Pass
    (d) (copyvio and plagiarism) No copyright violation or plagiarism was found.   Pass
  5. Comprehensiveness: The article is comprehensive enough.
  6.   Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (major aspects) The article has an adequately broad coverage of all major aspects.   Pass
    (b) (focused) The article is on topic and does not have any unnecessary deviations.   Pass
  7. Neutrality: The article is neutral.
  8.   Pass
    Notes Result
    The article is compliant with the policy on neutral point of view.   Pass
  9. Stability: The article is stable.
  10.   Pass
    Notes Result
    No ongoing edit warring or content disputes exist.   Pass
  11. Illustration: The article is very well illustrated.
  12.   Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales) No copyright issues were found.   Pass
    (b) (appropriate use with suitable captions) Use and captions are good.   Pass