Talk:Used to Love You/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 04:33, 16 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Grabbing this for a review.

Lead and infobox

I would remove “upcoming” as her album will be released in a couple days anyway. Done
I would put the names of the two singles in parenthesis after the phrase “its two singles” to be clear and concise. Done
Replace “it” in the final sentence with the song title to read as follows (Interscope Records released “Used to Love You”…) Keep the link to the record company Done
Replace “consisting in” with “consisting of” Done
Restructure the second sentence of the second paragraph as it reads very awkwardly. Done
Change the last sentence of the second paragraph to the following: (Stefani described the song as being inspired by the end of her marriage with Gavin Rossdale) to be more concise. Keep the link to Gavin Rossdale. Done
Change the first sentence to as follows: (“Used to Love You” was critically acclaimed for its lyrics and Stefani’s emotional delivery, with most critics calling it a heartbreaking song. Critics viewed the single as improvement over the 2014 releases, which Stefani later described as “rushed”.) Done
In the sentence about the music video release, replace “while” with “and” to read (during a concert on October 17, 2015 and its music video…) Done
Replace “It” with “The music video” Done
Clarify the meaning of emoting. What kind of emotions? Be more specific. Also this sentence reads very awkwardly so I would suggest rewording this sentence. Done

Background and release

Restructure the first sentence as you are attempting to convey a lot of information. It would be better to break this up into multiple separate sentences. Done
Replace “to start over” with “of starting over” Done
Remove “therefore” Done
Restructure the final sentence of the first paragraph as it reads very awkwardly. Great quote, but the sentence needs work and can be separated into two more concise sentences as a possible way of improvement. Done
Restructure the first two sentence to the following: (A&R President Aaron Bay-Schuck at Interscope Records asked songwriters and producers J.R. Rotem, Justin Tranter, and Julia Michaels to work with Stefani on the album. Stefani recalled saying the following to them during a recording session:) Use the quote after the colon. Done
As a general comment to the entire article, make sure the punctuation is outside the quotation marks unless you are citing a full sentence. Done
Remove “on the other hand” as this sentence is not being contrasted with anything. Done
Restructure the last sentence of the second paragraph. Separating it into separate sentences may improve it as you are attempting to communicate a lot of ideas here. Done
Just say (Before performing “Used to Love You”) Done
Remove comma after cover art Done

Composition

I would put the image as “upright” Done
An audio sample of the single would probably be better than the image for this section, but the image is appropriate (This is just a suggestion). Done
Change the second half of the first sentence to “Rotem is also one of the song’s producers.” Done
Do you really need all the sources in the second sentence? It is a little odd and looks weird on the page, especially with the phrase “synthpop ballad” being separated by multiple sources. Done
You do not need all those sources with the sentence on the song being inspired by the divorce. Two or three would be okay. There is such a thing as over-referencing (using 5 or more references) and I do not think using all those sources adds anything to the sentence. Done

Critical reception

Change the beginning of the second sentence to (Madison Vain of Entertainment Weekly felt the song’s “hyper-personal lyrics” were “immediate and affecting”,…) Done
The first quote from McDermott needs a closing quotation Done
Acknowledging is a strange word choice, change it to something else (like praising, etc.) Done

Commercial performance

Replace "received moderate success" to "was a moderate success" Done
Delete the phrase “for the week ending November 7, 2015” Done
Delete “ which serves as an extension to the Billboard Hot 100”

I think it's important to note that before charting within the top 100, it debuted here.

I will allow it. I didn't want you to remove the entire sentence, but I think defining what the chart is was a little unnecessary, but it is alright as it currently stands. Aoba47 (talk) 22:36, 17 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Change the second sentence to (The track peaked at number 52 on the Billboard Hot 100 on December 19, 2015). The information about it first entering the charts is not necessary.

I also think it's important to note that the track reentered the charts before peaking.

I am not entirely convinced that it is necessary, but I will allow it if you think that is important enough for inclusion. Aoba47 (talk) 22:36, 17 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Clarify the meaning of “elsewhere” or delete it as it is an empty word. Done
Remove comma after 57 Done

Music video

Could you possibly put an image from the music video here?

There was a picture posted, but IndianBio nominated it for deletion for not having enough encyclopedic value, and was subsequently deleted

I think that is somewhat silly as I have seen plenty of articles on songs use a screenshot from a music video (I think taking down images for not having "enough encyclopedic value" is kind of dumb), but for the purposes of this remove that is okay. Aoba47 (talk) 22:36, 17 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Clarify the meaning of “dealing with emotions”. I would remove it as I feel “on the verge of tears” covers it. Done
Replace “did not intend for it” with “was not intended” Done
Clarify meaning of “Ryan Seacrest website”. Just say the website. Done

Live performances

The phrase “where she also performed hits from her career” reads very awkwardly. I would combine for the first two sentences as follows: (On October 17, 2015, Stefani first performed “Used to Love You” live during a concert for Mastercard users at the Hammerstein Ballroom in New York City.) Keep the links. Done
Reword the phrase “the television performance debut” as it reads slightly awkward to me. Done
Considered is incorrectly spelled in the third sentence. Done
Clarify the reviews as talking about Stefani’s performance on Ellen as it is somewhat unclear. Done
Change the last sentences to the following: Stefani performed the song during various public appearances including, The Voice, The Tonight Show Starring Jimmy Fallon, and New Years Eve with Carson Daily. Use the references where appropriate and keep the links. There is no reason to break everything apart with specific dates here. Done

Credits and personnel

This is more of a note, but when the album does come out, add a “Credits and personnel” section with the album’s linear notes as the source.

Will do! Carbrera (talk) 22:20, 17 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

References

Link 31 is dead (archive to fix) Done
Link 41 is broken and does not lead to the article (archive to fix) Done
Link 35 is broken and does not lead to the article (archive to fix) Done
While not required for the GAN, I would recommend archiving all the links to avoid problems like those addressed in the above comments in the future

Thanks!

Final comments

@Carbrera: While I have left a lot of comments, this article has a lot of potential and can definitely reach the level of a GA with work. Let me know if you have any questions or comments about my review. Aoba47 (talk) 05:26, 16 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
- @Carbrera: Really strong article as usual. I am glad that I could help in some way. This is a definite ✓ Pass Hope you enjoy the album once it is released :-) Aoba47 (talk) 22:36, 17 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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