Talk:Van Cortlandt House/GA1

Latest comment: 8 months ago by Ghosts of Europa in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ghosts of Europa (talk · contribs) Hello Epicgenius! I'm looking forward to reviewing one of your articles. 05:12, 4 March 2024 (UTC)Reply


GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (inline citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Excellent work on this article! I've been to New York, but I never made it up to the Bronx. I'll have to visit next time I'm in town.

  • Well written, extremely thorough, and neutral.
  • Extensively cited. I spot checked 20 randomly chosen sources and found no source-text integrity issues.
  • No edit wars.
  • Great images, all public domain or permissively licensed.
  • Earwig gives a 23% similarity to the NPS website, but this looks like it's just keying off the proper names and architectural terms of art. I checked the article for specific phrases and didn't see any sign of copying.

I'm happy to pass this without any changes. However, if you want some picky feedback for a future FAC:

  • When Philipse's wife died, he remarried Olof Stevense Van Cortlandt's daughter, herself a widow - This is the first mention of Olof, but it's written like I should know who he was. More context might be helpful here.
  • The grounds were used by Patriot militia leaders Comte de Rochambeau, Marquis de Lafayette, and George Washington (the last of whom would become the first president of an independent United States) - This long parenthetical is awkward ("and future president George Washington"?), especially since you don't mention Grover Cleveland's presidency when talking about him. I'm guessing more readers will know about Washington's presidency than Cleveland's.
  • The Dames also announced plans to build an annex to the house, but Park Board landscape architect Charles Downing Lay vetoed these plans in April 1912. The New York City Department of Parks and Recreation (NYC Parks) received bids for the annex's construction in 1913 but rejected all of them. The annex, consisting of a caretaker's apartment adjacent to the main house, was finished in 1916 or 1917, just before World War I - This is confusing. If the plans were vetoed and the bids were rejected, how did it get built? It feels like a sentence is missing here.

Honestly, I think that's all I have. Great work! Ghosts of Europa (talk) 07:45, 5 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

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