Talk:Vertigo (wordless novel)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 97198 (talk · contribs) 08:50, 6 October 2014 (UTC)

I'll review this one. It's a great article, and a very fascinating read; there are some issues which I picked up that I've listed by section.

Lead

• "he aimed to present ... by presenting"—different word maybe? "depicting"?
  • Done. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)
• "The work is laden with symbolic motifs:—a bit nitpicky, but can you find a more subjective word to replace "laden"?
  • "filled"? Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)
• Expressionist should be linked on first mention
  • Done. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)

Synopsis

• "Each the focus of a section of the book,[1] which is in three parts"—missing word? Maybe "Each is"?
  • Done. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)
• "and comes the pair are evicted"—doesn't seem to be grammatical
  • I don't know what that "come" was there for, so I've removed it. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)

Production and publication history

• "Ward discarded numerous of the blocks he was dissatisfied with"—I'm not sure "numerous of" is grammatical** "numerous of the blocks" is definitely grammatical, but I've removed "of the" anyways. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)

• "It has since been reprinted by Dover Publications (2009)[citation needed]"—tag speaks for itself!
  • Thrown in a Worldcat ref. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)
• "Following initial publication"—"Following its"?
  • Done. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)

Style and analysis

• "The same telephone system that provides the Elderly gentleman"—name should be capitalised
  • Done. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)
• "Girl stretches herself out nude"—"the Girl"?
  • Done. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)
• "Ward aimed to present ... by presenting"—as with the lead, another word would be good
  • Done. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)

Reception and legacy

• "a number of such books by Americans and other Europeans"—this seems to imply that Ward was European
  • That was sloppy copy-&-paste, leaving the sentence out of its original context. I've reworded it to ", both new American works and reprints of European ones". Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)
• "each of which fewer copies than the last"—I'm not sure this is technically ungrammatical, but I feel it could read more nicely if reworded
  • Missing a "sold". Fixed. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)
• "Ralph M. Person was enthusiastic about the book ..."—this sentence is essentially a repetition of where Person is quoted in the production section; I think it fits in more nicely here, but I don't think it needs to be quoted twice
  • Wow, how did that happen? The quote has nothing to do with publication. Removed it from "Production and publication history". Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)

General

• Fair use rationale for infobox image is solid and other images are in the public domain
• All references appear to be reliable

Overall, the article is in great shape and is very close to GA quality. I'll place the nomination on hold for the changes to be made; let me know if you disagree with any of my comments. Great work! 97198 (talk) 08:50, 6 October 2014 (UTC)

• Thanks for taking this on! Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 23:15, 6 October 2014 (UTC)

• @Curly Turkey: All of your changes look great. I feel that the article satisfies all of the GA criteria so I'll go ahead and promote it. Well done! 97198 (talk) 13:00, 7 October 2014 (UTC)