Talk:Villains (Emma Blackery album)/GA1
Latest comment: 1 year ago by Ippantekina in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Ippantekina (talk · contribs) 09:04, 27 September 2022 (UTC)
Review coming soon. In the meantime, I'd appreciate very much if you could reciprocate by reviewing my pending GANs, such as Speak Now World Tour – Live. Ippantekina (talk) 09:04, 27 September 2022 (UTC)
Lead
edit- "gaining attention from Apple Inc.'s reveal of the iPhone X" unclear
- Could you elaborate on this? Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:40, 27 September 2022 (UTC)
- Mention something about the fact that her song was used in the reveal. Ippantekina (talk) 06:05, 28 September 2022 (UTC)
"the former single" → "the first of which" because "former"/"latter" are used for two objects
Background and release
edit- "Blackery played in local bands since she was 18 until she decided to pursue a solo career in 2012" her birth year would be helpful to add context
- May I ask why? Seems to be a bit out of place. Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:40, 27 September 2022 (UTC)
- The transition from age (18) to year (2012) doesn't mean much; either add her birth year for context or add the year when she was 18 (hope it makes sense..) Ippantekina (talk) 06:07, 28 September 2022 (UTC)
"The latter's extended play cover artwork" ditto → "The cover artwork of Magnetised"Why bolding "Emma Blackery European Tour"?- "for various formats" such as?
- Reworded. Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:40, 27 September 2022 (UTC)
Music and lyrics
edit- "Blackery started writing the song two weeks before Taylor Swift released "Look What You Made Me Do" (2017)" interesting, but would be more helpful to explore the connections between the two songs rather than just skimming on the name-dropping
- Reworded. Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:40, 27 September 2022 (UTC)
Link synths- For the lyrical interpretations, either attribute the quotes or paraphrase them i.e.
- In "Icarus", Blackery details "[her] own shortcomings and [her] own flaws" and "how [she] get[s] involved in all this public stuff and regret[s] it"
- Paraphrased: In "Icarus", Blackery details her flaws and regrets of public experiences.
- Hope it looks better now. Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:40, 27 September 2022 (UTC)
Overall
edit- The rest of the article is well done. I'd like ref 5 to be replaced by a non-primary source if possible, though this is not a requirement. Putting this On hold. Ippantekina (talk) 09:18, 27 September 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks a lot for reviewing my articles again :) Just posting this to let you know I will review Speak Now World Tour – Live, however I will do it in a couple of days as I am busy irl. Sebbirrrr (talk) 18:21, 27 September 2022 (UTC)
- @Ippantekina: Addressed your comments! Couldn't find a non-primary source for ref 5 unfortunately. Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:40, 27 September 2022 (UTC)
- @Sebbirrrr: Thanks! I have responded to two remaining points above, Ippantekina (talk) 06:08, 28 September 2022 (UTC)
- @Ippantekina: Done! Sebbirrrr (talk) 11:04, 28 September 2022 (UTC)
- Thank you for your patience. Passing!-- Ippantekina (talk) 12:25, 28 September 2022 (UTC)
- @Ippantekina: Done! Sebbirrrr (talk) 11:04, 28 September 2022 (UTC)
- @Sebbirrrr: Thanks! I have responded to two remaining points above, Ippantekina (talk) 06:08, 28 September 2022 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.