Talk:Vincent Clarkson/GA1

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 05:18, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• Looks all good to me

• Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Lead

Paragraph 1

• Please add "the" before "romantic and supernatural adventures..."

• Done Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Paragraph 2

• Like we talked about previously, you could probably remove the exact dates of the actors and actresses that played Vincent/Valerie, and just keep the years instead

• Done Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

• You can link "peeping tom" to the article for "Voyeurism"

• Done Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Background

Casting and creation

• Again, you can link "peeping tom" to the article for "Voyeurism"

• Done Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

• "unaware that the role would be expanded into the character of Vincent. " --> "unaware that the role would be expanded into the character of Vincent Clarkson."

• Done Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Characterization and cast response

• "He cited the role as inspiring future soap operas to address LGBT issues.[4]" --> "He cited the role as inspiration for future soap operas to address LGBT issues.[4]"

• Done Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

• What character did Tracey Ross play in Passions?

• Done Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Appearances

2001: Hidden Passions: Secrets from the Diaries of Tabitha Lenox

• All good! :)

• Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

2004–08: Passions

• I would add an apostrophe after "Crane Industries", even though it works fine both ways

• Done Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

• Link "Chad Harris–Crane" here please

• Done Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

• Again, I think you should add an apostrophe after "Crane Industries", even thought (like I said), it is grammatically correct both ways

• Done Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

• Insert an apostrophe between Daytime Confidential and 's' please

• Done Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

• "A few episodes later, Vincent emerges from the ocean and goes to Valerie's house to attack her off-screen for exposing his secrets." So again, this just reveals that he/she has dissociative identity disorder?

• On the show, Vincent views Valerie as a separate person and same goes for the other way around. The other characters, especially doctor Eve Russell, recognizes they are in fact the same person and there is something seriously medically/psychologically wrong with him. However, no one on the show diagnoses him beyond being crazy so I am hesitant to say with certainty he has a specific mental disorder when it is never confirmed on the show. Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Impact and reception

Paragraph 1

• "Throughout his run on Passions, the character received mixed feedback from critics." --> "Throughout his run on Passions, he received mixed feedback from critics."

• Done. Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

• Please remove the first "that" in between "Giddens felt" and "the fact that Vincent and Chad..."

• Done. Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Paragraph 2

• "Eve snd Julian's son," --> "Eve and Julian's son,"

• Done. Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

• Rest is great

• Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

End of GA Review:

Just a bunch of quick fixes! Great work as usual. On hold for seven days and contact me here (@PING me) with any questions. Thanks! Let me know if there's anything else you'd like me to review! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 13:13, 18 June 2016 (UTC).

@Carbrera: Thank you for the review! I have addressed all of your comments. Let me know if there is anything else I can do. :-) Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)