Talk:Vistara/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 10:09, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Will review. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 10:09, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• Is it possible to remove citations from the lead? All facts of lead should be mentioned in the main text also; I feel the citations should be in the main text only
  • Not necessarily. MOS:LEAD says not to include citations in the lead if the sourced statements there are cited elsewhere in the article.--Jetstreamer ^Talk 12:39, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

All I wish to say is that we should have all the facts from the lead in the main text of the article. There is no reason we can not. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 13:26, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Sorry, but you cannot require something that is not clearly written in any policy. In particular, this is one of the cases. It is perfectly valid to have citations in the lead section.--Jetstreamer ^Talk 21:14, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

I request this in most of my reviews, because when I was a learner others asked me to do so. I understand your point. I am not adamant on this, I always allow the nominator to decide in cases like this. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 03:18, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

Therefore I suggest anyone working on improving the article towards gaining GA status to disregard this suggestion of yours.--Jetstreamer ^Talk 21:09, 10 March 2016 (UTC)

We may have conflicting opinions, but let us not continue our argument. I see the nominator has considered it better to remove the citations. It is their choice. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 03:36, 11 March 2016 (UTC)

Yes, because they might have thought that not doing so would make you fail the nomination. You must clearly state here that this point is not a requirement for GA nominations.--Jetstreamer ^Talk 21:00, 11 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks, will clarify that. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 04:46, 12 March 2016 (UTC)

• Tata Sons and Singapore Airlines Links
• Delhi and Mumbai Links
• As of 03 2016 What does this mean? Write properly
• a fleet of 9 Airbus A320-200 aircraft According to MoS all numbers below 10 are generally to be written in words. Check this throughout the article

History

• mid 1990s Hyphen
• You may link foreign direct investment
• Say any one of % or percent or per cent throughout the article
• a combined $100 million You can use money conversion template
• brand identity Vistara Vistara-->"Vistara"
• The airline will initially operate from level 4 of the terminal, which is being used by international carriers. From July 2015, it will be shifted to level 3, which when complete will be dedicated to domestic carriers This has become the past now
• Vistara inaugurated 'Aviation Security Training Institute' an in-house institute --> Vistara inaugurated the Aviation Security Training Institute, an in-house institute

Corporate affairs

• Link satellite city
• as chief commercial officer --> as the chief commercial officer
• (CCO), both are with Singapore Airlines background. --> (CCO)-both are with Singapore Airlines background.
• Initially it started out with a three-member board comprising Swee Wah Mak, Mukund Rajan and Prasad Menon, a Tata group veteran, as chairman --> Initially it started out with a three-member board comprising Swee Wah Mak, Mukund Rajan and Prasad Menon (a Tata group veteran), with the latter as chairman
• Who are Swee Wah Mak, Mukund Rajan, Som Mittal and Sangeeta Pendurkar?
• introducing 2 new members 2 in words, as per MoS
• ₹5 billion convert

Destinations

• As of 03 2016 Write properly
• You can delete the "Ref" column in the table and put the ref. simply at the end of the line preceding the table

Fleet

• As of 03 2016 Write properly
• The airline plans to take delivery of all 13 A320ceo by March 2016 and 7 A320neo of its initial order by 2018. I think it should be Airbus A320ceo and Airbus A320neo
• Vistara CEO Phee Teik Yeoh You have already introduced him, you can simply write "Phee Teik Yeoh"
• and to launch international flights within two years "to" is not needed

Services

Needs much copyediting as follows:

• Being a full-service carrier Vistara --> Being a full-service carrier, Vistara
• 4 rows in 2-2 configuration --> four rows in 2-2 configuration
• A320-200 fleet --> Airbus A320-200 fleet
• The business class seats are 20.12 inches wide with 42 inches seat pitch Convert templates
• Currently, there are no LCD screens attached with seats but it provides pre-loaded tablets for its business-class fliers' Source?
• Link LCD, tablets
• introduce the class Mention the class by name
• 6 rows in 3-3 configuration 6 in words
• Each being 18 inch wide and of 33 to 36 inches pitch Form a proper sentence. Convert templates needed. What is pitch?
• As of now Vistara's A320 aircraft don't have in-flight entertainment screens installed. When is now? don't --> do not
• A320 aircraft Airbus A320-200
• Vistara will beam content directly to passenger's personal electronic devices (tablet and smart phones) through one-way Wi-Fi connection on board "will"? When? Or hasi t started doing so? WiFi-->Wi-Fi
• For business class passenger the airline provides pre-loaded tablets as an interim solution Fact repeated from earlier section. It is sourced here but not earlier
• Taj hotels group h in capital
• options of 1 veg, 1 non-veg dishes in economy class, 2 veg, 1 non-veg in premium economy and 2 veg, 2 non-veg dishes for business-class cabin numbers in words, use semicolons
• in partnership with GVK has introduced --> in partnership with GVK, has introduced
• from Mumbai T2 terminal "the"

Frequent-flyer program

• No bold needed, including caption
• frequent-flyer program, it operates semicolon not comma

• In ref. 50, date retrieved?

M.soumen, I saw just now that you have already made most of the changes I recommended. Good. So, here I list the few remaining issues to make work easier: Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 16:21, 10 March 2016 (UTC)

• History: a combined $100 million You can use money conversion template. Not compulsory though.
• Service:

• The business class seats are 20.12 inches wide with 42 inches seat pitch Convert templates
• The fact about pre-loaded tablets is repeated in Business class and In-flight entertainment
• Could "tablet" be linked?
• Vistara will beam content directly to passenger's personal electronic devices (tablet and smart phones) through one-way Wi-Fi connection on board "will"? When? Or hasi t started doing so? WiFi-->Wi-Fi
• Refrain from saying "now" or "currently". Please mention the time referred to.
• Currently Vistara's A320 aircraft don't have in-flight entertainment screens installed. This still needs to mention which time is being referred to. You can say "as of 2016".
• ...through one-way Wi-Fi connection on board WiFi-->Wi-Fi
• Taj hotels group h in capital
• options of 1 veg, 1 non-veg dishes in economy class, 2 veg, 1 non-veg in premium economy and 2 veg, 2 non-veg dishes for business-class cabin numbers in words

M.soumen, can you find some time for this? Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 10:43, 15 March 2016 (UTC)

@M.soumen: Please try to respond within five days. If response is delayed by more than five days, I shall be forced to fail this article. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 12:37, 23 March 2016 (UTC)

@Sainsf: Have made the changes you have suggested and cleaned the references. Think, now its good to go!Magentic Manifestations (talk) 05:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks a lot Magentic Manifestations! You are indeed helpful. The article looks good to go. I am happy to promote this. Excellent work! Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 06:15, 24 March 2016 (UTC)