Talk:Vivah/GA1

Latest comment: 9 years ago by Ssven2 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 02:52, 29 November 2014 (UTC)Reply


I will review this article. Thank you. Ssven2 (talk) 02:52, 29 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

Discussion

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  • @25 Cents FC: In general (meaning for the entire article), Remove the "INRConvert" and replace it with just INR (for example: 90 million (US$1.1 million) should be written as 90 million as the rates will keep changing. Ssven2 (talk) 03:17, 29 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • Remove the "Parinayam" reference and substitute it with another reliable source. Generally, speaking, video sources are rather inappropriate as a reliable source. Place the reference in the "Box Office" section as per WP:LEAD as you have written about the film's DVD release there. Ssven2 (talk) 03:17, 29 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

Plot

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Cast

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Production

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  • "Barjatya was very concerned about the music for the film. He said, since it's a lyrics oriented film, it should possess a lyrical feel." can be re-written as "Barjatya felt that the film should possess a lyrical feel, since it's a lyrics oriented film." Ssven2 (talk) 04:22, 29 November 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • Remove the line "for example portions where water leaking, half down posters and spit marks on wall." and replace it with "for example portions where water leaking takes place and spit marks." Ssven2 (talk) 04:22, 29 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

Soundtrack

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  • "The composer has put together a soundtrack of old world charm, with a full orchestra behind some of the best known voices of the Hindi movie." looks like peacockry and sholud be removed. Ssven2 (talk) 04:42, 29 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

Box office performance

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Reviews

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Influence

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  • "He announced to create an entire exhibition around her and noted her tremendous potential" can be rephrased as "He planned to create an entire exhibition around her". 04:42, 29 November 2014 (UTC)
  • "Several movies have been highly successful in Bihar and their protagonists have been emulated by the movie goers; in Vivah's case, it became fashionable to marry like Poonam and Prem from Vivah." should be replaced with "Vivah inspired couples at that time to emulate the protagonists." Ssven2 (talk) 04:42, 29 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

References

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I am going to place it on hold. Ssven2 (talk) 04:17, 13 December 2014 (UTC)Reply

Since the nominator has been absent from Wikipedia for 2 months, I have to fail this article. Don't feel bad, User:25 Cents FC, you address the concerns shown in the review first, then re-nominate it after another good copyedit by sending it to the requests page. Find some more information, especially the "Production" and "Influence" section. Be present on Wikipedia, especially when you have nominated an article for GA or FA.   Ssven2 (talk) 06:36, 16 December 2014 (UTC)Reply