Talk:Vol. 3: (The Subliminal Verses)/GA1

GA Review

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• Resolution of cover art images should be lowered if possible, they're a bit big.
  • Just so I'm clear on this, what is an acceptable resolution? REZTER ^TALK ø 10:59, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
    • This image had a 240x240 version uploaded. I haven't checked if it's the same thing, but something that size would be good (and for the other image, obviously). giggy _(:O) 01:09, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
      • Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 01:45, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
• Check italics for ref publishers like Metal Hammer (sometimes it is; sometimes it isn't) (and there are others, check all).
  • Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
• Ref 21 ([1]) publisher is Allmusic.
  • Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
• Ref 25 publisher is charts.org.nz (note the nz)
  • Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
• In Professional reviews, AMG shouldn't have italics. And Stylus mag should?
  • Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
• 'Also lead vocalist Corey Taylor drank heavily throughout their time in The Mansion, "I would drink from the moment I got up until the moment I passed out."' - don't start sentences with "also"... needs reword.
  • Reworded, check it out. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
• "Jordison explained that they had wrote more than enough" - wrote --> written?
  • Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
• "Though many songs, such as "Pulse of the Maggots" and "Before I Forget",[12] use the band's usual "pounding metal" style." - should this have been merged with the previous sentence?
  • Done REZTER ^TALK ø 12:53, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
• The Musical and lyrical themes section is a lot of quoting. Use your own words, based on the reviews, rather than quoting - that's why there's a reception section.
  • OK man, I rewrote it, check it out. REZTER ^TALK ø 14:18, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
• "ohnny Loftus of Allmusic, wrote the album" - why the comma? (This is common throughout.)
  • I tidied up some of the prose. REZTER ^TALK ø 14:39, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
• "with "Before I Forget" from the album" - I don't think you need the last three words.
  • Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:26, 22 June 2008 (UTC)

Please leave me a note when done. Cheers, giggy _(:O) 10:34, 22 June 2008 (UTC)

More comments below. giggy _(:O) 01:09, 23 June 2008 (UTC)

• "Similar to their previous albums the lyrics include strong use of metaphors and touches upon themes including anger, disaffection and psychosis." - doesn't sound good starting a sentence with "similar"... just talk about what's on this album, then perhaps mention that it's similar to something else.
  • Removed. Blackngold29 01:32, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
• "being labelled as including "stately vocal harmonies"" - by who?
  • Accredited. Blackngold29 01:32, 23 June 2008 (UTC)