Talk:WBFS-TV/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 00:06, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Will review. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 00:06, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

I really enjoyed this one! On hold; over to you. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 16:58, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check

Earwig says good to go. Could not find any concerns of close paraphrasing either myself.

File(s)

All images are relevant and have a valid public domain rationale.

Prose

• In the lead, "marking the fourth—and successful—attempt" – the successful line sounds out of place here. Should it be "first successful"? Otherwise I would just remove it.
  • Done
• Wikilink Miami as first mention in the body.
  • Done
• Wikilink UHF for unfamiliar readers.
  • Done and spelled it out
• "Gateway got a permit in 1964" – is a permit correct here? Earlier the article says the permit.
  • Changed
• "was used starting in 1974" reads a bit jagged to me. Could you rephrase it?
  • Reworded
• "programs, similar to what WKID-TV" – recommend using a semi-colon here instead of a comma as the sentence is quite long.
  • Reworded
• "until later in the year" – do we have a month for this? It would help to justify the 'no other activity' line.
  • Reworded
• Should the article in The Shlenker Group be capitalised? It is written in lowercase later.
• "The Grant Broadcasting System sold the Dallas" – this is the first time a Dallas station is mentioned.
  • Fort Worth, Dallas, you know, same thing basically in this content, but reworded.
• "the Grant-Shlenker group" – if this is the group's new name I would mention this fact in the previous sentence where Grant becomes the outright owner.
• Reworded to indicate it's not a name change
• This may be personal taste but I do not like how "Equally importantly, the Grant-Shlenker group was highly leveraged and ill-prepared for a slowdown in advertising" is formatted; IMO it makes sense to start with a slowdown in advertising and go on to say they were ill-prepared for this.
  • Reworded
• "Syndicators began to come calling at a group" – what does 'come calling' mean?
  • Reworded. They wanted their money!
• "largely as a leverage maneuver in bankruptcy court" – wikilink bankruptcy court here and unlink its subsequent mention in the next paragraph.
  • Done
• The Grant receivership sentence is long. Can "which was formally filed on October 13 and approved on March 30, 1988" be made its own sentence?
  • Done
• "resolving a schedule clearance problem" – any elaboration possible?
  • Reworded
• Is there a better way to phrase "soon-to-be created"? It just made me giggle a little reading it.
  • Used "forthcoming"
• Wikilonk Viacom and CBS.
  • Changed
• Wikilunk Doral.
  • Done
• "The morning newscast failed to gather ratings traction" – I do not think traction is right placed here.
  • Changed

Refs

Passes spotchecks on refs 5, 8, 23, 31, 38 and 50:

• For ref 11, where does it say that the call letters were assigned in January 1983?
  • New ref needed and added.
• Ref 19 appears to be a dead URL.
  • Newspapers.com problem. I have no idea what is going on here, and it's alarming (between Saturday and Sunday, some clippings became unavailable from the Lincoln Nebraska State Journal that I had for KUCV.) I can see the clipping on my end when I search for it, but I cannot link to it. Did they pull the publication? Archive link added here. The 4E clipping is also archived but I cannot include more than one archive link. If this is a broader issue, it could affect many more pages. I have contacted newspapers.com for more information.
    • This is the first time I have experienced this with more than one publication. The other time was WSWG where the newspaper was apparently scanned without final contract approval.
      • Certainly an interesting predicament. Hopefully this is resolved soon.
• In either refs 47 or 48 I could not quite verify the line "Of the 15 CBS Corporation-owned UPN affiliates, 11 were chosen as charter affiliates of The CW".
  • Reworded and added a ref.

Others

• Recommend Template:Use American English (optional)

@LunaEatsTuna: Done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 21:30, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Nice work! Pass. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 23:09, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

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