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Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 15:43, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
Hi there, I'll be reviewing this article. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 15:43, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
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1. Well-written: | ||
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | Just a few, see issues below. | |
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | ||
2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | Spot checks look good, I'm happy with sourcing. | |
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | Nearly all newspaper sources or books, I'm happy with reliability here. | |
2c. it contains no original research. | Everything looks to be cited well, only the one minor issue I noted below. | |
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. | ||
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | ||
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | ||
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | ||
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | ||
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. |
Both images are used only in the infobox of the article. | |
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | Logos of the stations are certainly relevant. They are self-explanatory so a caption is not needed in my opinion. | |
7. Overall assessment. |
Issues with criterion 1a
edit@PCN02WPS: Resolved all of these. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:36, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
- I'm happy with the fixes and I see no other issues so I will give this a pass! Well done. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 17:49, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
Lead and infobox
edit- "In 1969, its tower was blown off its base in a dynamiting incident" → this might be a little more on the picky side, but the second "its" here is ambiguous; was it the tower's base or the station's base?
- Fixed
History
edit- "the only allotted VHF frequency for southern Kentucky" → granted, I am not very familiar with the subject matter being discussed here, but "VHF frequency" strikes me as being very similar to "ATM machine" or "PIN number", since the "F" in "VHF" itself stands for "frequency". Is there precedent to just say "the only allotted VHF for southern Kentucky", perhaps with the abbreviation expanded upon first mention, or would that sound strange?
- "VHF channel" probably will read better.
- "Programs were received by off-air pickup and by a private microwave link that fed ABC affiliate..." → I know this sounds stupid, but linking microwave could potentially be helpful since I would guess that most readers (even given the subject of the page) would default to thinking of microwave oven when that word is used.
- Done
- "The station would continue without network programming" → tense sounds a little awkward here, I'd recommend just saying "The station continued without network programming..." instead
- "befitting the slogan of "Wonderfully Live Television"." → I don't think the word "of" is necessary here
- Done
- "former National Guard armory" → link National Guard (United States)
- Done
- "At 2 a.m. on the morning of September 26, 1969," → "the morning of" reads as redundant to me, since the exact time is also given, so I'd say that could be removed
- "When the sun came up, a perilous sight emerged to greet the transmitter engineer driving to work: " → this is a little too informal, almost like it's out of a news article or a novel
- Reworded, though this is actually what happened! https://www.newspapers.com/clip/52751741/
- "Professional immediately promised to complete the task" → Since the name of the company was just given for the first time, I would say "Professional Telecasting immediately promised..." here
- Done
- "In order to complete the new image" → to what does "image" refer here?
- It's very...vague, but I've tried to reword it. Sometimes, when you put a ton of money into a station, you change the call sign to convince people "it's not that old station".
- "Payne would prove to be a long-lasting leader at WBKO and a respected broadcaster, serving on the board..." → this is also a little picky, but the newspaper source does not mention him being a "respected broadcaster" (although I'm sure he was); is there a source that mentions this directly?
- Removed this line by simply noting he was a national figure with the NAB and ABC affiliates board.
Technical information
edit- "until the start of 2009" → I see the source mentions that the crews would return to work on January 3, 2009; is there any source that mentions the transition being completed and/or what date that happened?
- Found one and added it