Talk:WDCA/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 00:34, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

Will get to this within seven days. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 00:34, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

There we are! On hold. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 03:13, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

Nice work! Pass. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 15:20, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio

Earwig says good to go.

Files

Good to go. File 1 is indeed public domain and files 2–5 each have valid non-free use rationales.

Prose

• Wikilink UHF or perhaps spell it "ultra high frequency (UHF)".
• Did Rogers elaborate on why it would not be viable?
  • Not in any specific words, but UHF stations were, uh, going through it at that time. Anyone in TV back in 1956 would have known this.
    • Noted.
• "from Automated Electronics, Inc., of Dallas" — I do not think we need a comma after Inc. here.
• "As part of his transition from an on-air personality to a media executive, he began going by Milton instead of Milt" — recommend "…media executive, Grant began going by Milton instead of Milt" to avoid repetition of pronouns.
• Just curious: is there a reason Capital Broadcasting Company is not abbreviated like some of the other companies?
  • It's not really what comes to mind with "CBC". Also, there is a still-extant and operating Capitol Broadcasting Company, with an O, in North Carolina, and I wanted to avoid confusion with it.
    • Oh I see! That makes sense.
• I reckon wikilinking construction permit is unnecessary as readers unfamiliar with building jargon will likely know what it means.
  • It has a specific meaning in broadcasting, so I think this is merited. I've had other reviewers ask for this link.
• Wikilink tape delayed for unfamiliar readers.
  • • Noted, thanks.
• "continued to promote itself as a sports destination" — I may be in error but "destination" in this context sounds slightly on the informal side.
• Wikilink road game.
• Both "tape delayed" and "tape-delayed" are each used once in this article; choose one spelling variation for consistency.
  • Second one is a hyphenated adjective.
    • I see!
• "For children, the station was the home of "Captain 20", a" sounds slightly editorialised; recommend rephrasing.
• "From 1972 until his 1984 death" — recommend "From 1972 until his death in 1984".
• The sentence starting "Despite being the second independent…" is a bit of a mouthful; perhaps create a new sentence for the Varity line as "It had, per Paul Harris in Variety,"?
• "the station conducted a schedule overhaul, increased its sports and movie telecasts" needs an and to connect the sentences.
• "investor Robert Bass, and while" — recommend a semi-colon instead of a comma.
• "$200 million on January 1, 1988, and missed the first payment deadline" — how about but instead of and here?
• Even though the article is titled UPN, I would wikilink United Paramount Network instead of the acronym as it looks rather strange and inconsistent. Same with the lead if you decide not to trout me for this.
• "In 2000, Viacom purchased CBS." — wikilink CBS as first mention in the body.
• "the United in UPN" — hm?
  • UPN was a partnership of United Television and Paramount.
    • Ooh!
• Could Chris-Craft be wikilinked somewhere?
• "over UHF channel 20" – already linked.
• "including a new 8:00 p.m. prime time newscast" — perhaps wikilink prime time? Likewise for the lead.
• In § Newscasts, are the paragraphs necessary? I reckon just being one should be fine.
  • Kept the first paragraph break — there is a very large time gap between the first and second efforts!
    • That looks much better!

@LunaEatsTuna: Anything not bulleted above has been fixed. Also see below. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:03, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

References

• I notice that the usage of retrieval dates is inconsistent, such as with refs 5 and 19–21 among others which are online URLs.
  • Cannot do this without a URL, which is how I write my ProQuest citations.
    • Noted!

Spotcheck

Refs 5; 12; 19; 22; 38; 51; 69; and 75 all good. WP:AGF on ref 42 as it keeps crashing my nimble mobile device.

• For ref 63, I could not seem to verify the Friendship Heights part.
  • Added a separate ref invoke.
    • Good.

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