Talk:Wait a Minute (The Pussycat Dolls song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: KyleJoan (talk · contribs) 11:38, 15 June 2021 (UTC)

Hi there! I'm happy to be reviewing this. Comments will come shortly. KyleJoan^talk 11:38, 15 June 2021 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Overall

• Copyvio – pass; "Violation Unlikely" per Earwig's Copyvio Detector
• Images – pass; fair use artwork in infobox

Comments

• "The song features a guest appearance from American rapper and the song's producer Timbaland who co-wrote the song with Keri Hilson and Craig Longmiles." This seems like an overcomplicated way to state this info. Remove "a guest appearance from" and specify that Timbaland produced and co-wrote the song in a separate clause (e.g., Timbaland, who produced the song and co-wrote it with Hilson and Longmiles).
• "In the song, the artists flirt and commit to a playful give and take, highlighting the differences between the two sexes." Specify that this is related to the song's lyrical content.
• "The song received positive reviews from music critics who complimented Timbaland's contributions and highlighted it as one of the album's standout tracks of the album." Again, overcomplicated. Add a comma before "who" and remove "of the album".
• ""Wait a Minute" was released as the sixth and final single of the album on October 16, 2006, to US contemporary hit radio and was made available for digital download on January 26, 2007." Replace "the album" with "PCD".
• In the entire article, add commas before "while".
• In the lede's second paragraph, add commas before "as" and "and".
• "A music video" → "the music video".
• "...their headlining, Doll Domination Tour (2009)" → "...the group's Doll Domination Tour (2009)".
• "In April 2005, the Pussycat Dolls..." Put the "American girl group" description here as well since this is the body's opener.
• Remove "currently" per MOS:CURRENTLY.
• "...enlisting various producers including, Timbaland." The comma should be placed before "including".
• "...however only the latter was included in the album" → "...however only the latter was included on the album". The same goes for the next sentence.
• "The song was written and produced by Timbaland with additional writing by Hilson and Craig Longmiles." Place a comma before "with".
• "Longmiles contribution was not included..." It's missing an apostrophe. The description "included" is awkward. "Noted" might be more appropriate.
• "The artist's" → "The artists'".
• "The Pussycat Dolls and Timbaland have a humorous give and take between them, highlighting the differences between the two sexes." Make it clear that this bit describes them singing to each other.
• Add two subheadings in the "reception" section that separates the first paragraph, which discusses the song's critical response, and the second paragraph, which discusses its commercial performance.
• "Similarly, Nick Butler from Sputnikmusic deemed the song as "another highlight track"." Remove "as".
• "Lisa Haines of the BBC felt the song is great and "perfect for singing along to with a handy hairbrush"." The description "is great and" isn't necessary. Just say Haines wrote the song was "perfect...".
• "A writer for Popjustice..." Just say Popjustice published the review.
• "Andrew Mueller of The Guardian opined "Wait a Minute" as..." Replace "as" with "was".
• "He went on to allude its lyrics to a "daytime talk show dialogue"." Replace "allude" with "compare".
• Unless you can find a source to verify that the song ended up "becoming the first single from PCD not to enter the top ten; in New Zealand it became their lowest charting song", remove this entire phrase. The same goes for the suggestion that the song "achieved the group's highest peak (number three)" in Finland and how it ended up "becoming the group's lowest charting single in certain national charts".
• "Timbaland joined the group at MTV New Year's Eve special, MTV Goes Gold - New Year's Eve 2007, to perform "Wait a Minute"." Remove the name of the special and just say the MTV New Year's Eve Special.
• "The song was performed while the Pussycat Dolls supported Christina Aguilera's Back to Basics Tour (2007) and during their headlining Doll Domination Tour (2009)" → "The group performed the song when they supported Christina Aguilera's Back to Basics Tour (2007) and on their second tour, the Doll Domination Tour (2009)".
• Provide a source to verify the CD single tracklist.
• Add access dates where applicable.
• Archive all archivable refs.
• Remove the italicization of "PCD" from ref No. 7, as the template will do that for the album title automatically.

While the article needs a bit of copyediting, I believe it's close to meeting the GA criteria, so it is now  On hold. Cheers! KyleJoan^talk 12:33, 15 June 2021 (UTC)

• Hey there MrHyacinth! Wanted to check in on how the work on the article is going. I see you haven't been active in a number of days, so I'll give this a final verdict a week upon your return. Cheers! KyleJoan^talk 16:14, 22 June 2021 (UTC)
  • @MrHyacinth: It seems your time off from editing is taking place for longer than I had anticipated, so I must fail this nomination at this time. That said, the article is close to meeting the GA criteria, so please don't hesitate to nominate it in the future once the rest of the suggested changes have been made. Cheers! KyleJoan^talk 04:44, 30 June 2021 (UTC)
    • @KyleJoan: Hello! I'd like to apologize, but due to personal reasons and bad timing could not commit to the nomination! So I apologize for consuming your time and effort, which I appreciate! For sure, I'll nominated it again! MrHyacinth (talk) 20:38, 4 July 2021 (UTC)

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