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Reviewer: Caponer (talk · contribs) 12:32, 19 January 2015 (UTC)Reply

Dr. Blofeld, I will be conducting a thorough and comprehensive review of this article within the next 48 hours. Please let me know if you have any questions or comments in the meantime. Thanks! -- Caponer (talk) 12:32, 19 January 2015 (UTC)Reply

Dr. Blofeld, without further ado, I've finally completed my review of this article. While it meets all the criteria for Good Article status, I've listed a few comments and questions below. Once these have all been satisfied, I'll feel confident in passing this article for Good Article status. Once again, you've written a phenomenal article, and it has been a privilege reviewing it. I made several minor edits and tweaks throughout so please let me know if you have questions regarding any of these. -- Caponer (talk) 03:21, 23 January 2015 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review!♦ Dr. Blofeld 19:24, 23 January 2015 (UTC)Reply
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lede

  • Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lead section, I assess that the lede sufficiently defines the the original Waldorf–Astoria, establishes context, explains why the original hotel is notable, and summarizes the article's most important points. I have no corrections or suggestions for this section.

Background Opening and early years of the Waldorf

  • In the first sentence "North of the Caspar Samler farm, extending on Fifth Avenue..." what is meant by "extending on Fifth Avenue?" Should this to or along instead?
Changed to along.
  • I suggest writing twenty acres as 20 acres (8.1 ha) or 20 acres (0.081 km2).
Done.
  • Since this is a United States property, it is not necessary to specify US$. This goes for all the successive mentions of dollar amounts throughout the prose.
Done.
  • There should be an inline citation at the end of the first paragraph.
Added.
  • In the second paragraph, it's mentioned that the Waldorf hotel is initially characterized as "Boldt's Folly" but Boldt hasn't been introduced in the prose at this point. He should probably be introduced before the mentioning of this nickname.
Mentioned him with Folly.♦ Dr. Blofeld 18:21, 23 January 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Boldt is again mentioned in the second paragraph but he hasn't been introduced in the prose, only in the lede. As stated above, he should probably be introduced in the first paragraph to remedy this.
See above.
  • I suggest moving up the fact that the hotel was placed intentionally adjacent to Caroline Astor's residence. This would be more faithful to the background's chronology.
Done.

Opening of the Astoria and consolidation

  • The last sentence of the first paragraph requires an inline citation.
Added.
  • The rest of this subsection is thoroughly sourced and well-written and I have no other comments or questions.

Society

  • There are two mentions regarding the hotel's accommodations for Prince Henry of Prussia. Should these be combined?
Combined them.
  • The remainder of this section is thoroughly sourced and well-written and I have no other comments or questions.

Architecture

Done.
  • In the second paragraph, I suggest using an Oxford comma in the second sentence. I noticed up until this point in the prose, Oxford commas are used, so I would suggest making their usage consistent throughout.
Done.
  • Smoking-room probably doesn't need a hyphen.
Removed.
  • I suggest spelling out "Company" in "General Electric Co."
Done.
  • Prince Albert of Saxe-Coburg and Gotha is linked to Albert, Prince Consort, but he died almost thirty years before the Waldorf opened.
Delinked.
  • In the first paragraph of the Astoria Hotel's prose, ensure that internal citations are listed in numerical order.
Done.
  • The remainder of this section is thoroughly sourced and well-written and I have no other comments or questions.

Notable people

  • The last sentence of the Boldt requires an inline citation, as does the final sentence of the Boomer bio.
Done.
  • Ensure that the spelling of Oscar Tschirky's name is consistent throughout prose. In the beginning of the article he was listed as "Oscar Tschirsky."
Done.
  • The final sentence of the Tschirky bio requires an inline citation.
Done.


@Caponer: thank you for your review. I believe Dr. Blofeld and I have addressed the above issues. --Rosiestep (talk) 03:07, 24 January 2015 (UTC)Reply

@Dr. Blofeld: and @Rosiestep:, thank you for your thorough and diligent edits and responses to my above comments and suggestions. I've re-reviewed the article and it looks in order to pass to Good Article status. An outstanding job well done, as always! -- Caponer (talk) 09:11, 24 January 2015 (UTC)Reply
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