Talk:Walkman S Series/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Aircorn in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Aircorn (talk · contribs) 02:48, 5 February 2012 (UTC)Reply


Thank you for your work on the article, but it needs quite a bit more before we can assess it as being a "Good" one. Don't be disheartened, it can take quite a bit of effort to get to this stage. One of the bigger issues is references. The performance section is completely unreferenced, and obviously this is a section that really needs references. It could do with some expansion as well, although if no further information exists that can be hard. Has it been reviewed by technology magazines? The lead needs reworking too. Basically the lead should not introduce new information, it should just summarise the rest of the article. See what you can do to fix these issues and then renominate. AIRcorn (talk) 02:48, 5 February 2012 (UTC)Reply