Talk:Walmart/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Retrolord (talk · contribs) 22:13, 30 January 2013 (UTC)

The following things are concerning me:

• In 1945, he met Butler Brothers, a regional retailer. This sentence could be worded better.

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:26, 4 February 2013 (UTC)

• On June 30, 2008, Walmart unveiled a new company logo, featuring the non-hyphenated name "Walmart" and in place of the star, a symbol that resembles a sunburst or flower. Not sure about the wording

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:26, 4 February 2013 (UTC)

• It lets customers find new foods for a fee of $7 a month from the comfort of the couch. Sounds like an advertisement?

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:26, 4 February 2013 (UTC)

• While it's little known outside of the drug industry. Not sure about tone of that sentence

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:26, 4 February 2013 (UTC)

• The first Walmart store opened in Rogers, Arkansas in 1962. Does this belong in the "Walmart Discount Stores" section?

 Done

• Alot of info in "Walmart Discount Stores" seems to be repeated in the following section
• tags still present
• [when?] tag still present
• (spelled as in Canadian English) ?
• Several reasons led to Wal-mart's failure in the German market.

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:29, 4 February 2013 (UTC)

• Walmart International section could perhaps be split up?
• Walmart is headquartered in the Wal-Mart Home Office complex in Bentonville, Arkansas. The company's business model is based on selling a wide variety of general merchandise at "always low prices."[9] They refer to their employees as "associates". All Wal-Mart stores in the US and Canada also have designated "greeters" at the store entrance, a practice pioneered by founder Sam Walton and later copied by other retailers. This just seems like a list of some features of walmart
• Each week, about 100 million customers, nearly one-third of the U.S. population, visit Walmart's U.S. stores (200 million according to Walmart's website) Make up your mind?

 Done I removed it. One source was Walmart's website (for the 100 million claim) and another was a slideshow (for the 1/3rd of America). I think extraordinary claims require extraordinary sources, and that was more like infotainment news. CorporateM (Talk) 14:35, 4 February 2013 (UTC)

• In June 2006, Walmart was excluded from the investment portfolio of The Government Pension Fund of Norway. Not sure this deserves a mention? Im sure other investors have excluded them too.

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:44, 4 February 2013 (UTC)

• The entire Employee and labor relations section just seems to keep pushing the same points every paragraph: Walmart is BAD, they are ANTI-UNION, they are ANTI-EVERYTHING. I dont see how you could have a favourable view of walmart after reading that section. Please document some poitive reviews of Walmart also. It isnt helped that it is linked to an article critiscm of walmart.

 Done This is a big edit, so the original author may get mad at me, but I moved it to summary style, since the Criticisms of Walmart article is GA and has a good sub-section lead. CorporateM (Talk) 14:44, 4 February 2013 (UTC)

• In response, WWU received a 'Dear Customer' letter from Wal-Mart. Elaborate?

 Done removed in move to summary style

• I would recomend removing most of the employee and labour relations into the critiscm article, and leaving a more balanced viewpoint in the main article. The section is fartoo long and doesnt flow when reading.

 Done removed in move to summary style

Unfortunately i have to put your article on hold until some improvements are made. Thanks! Retrolord (talk) 22:50, 30 January 2013 (UTC)

Article was failed. ★★RetroLord★★ 05:16, 17 February 2013 (UTC)