Talk:Walter Hunt (inventor)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name (talk · contribs) 21:31, 3 April 2022 (UTC)

Hello. I will be taking care of this review. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 21:31, 3 April 2022 (UTC)

I have never failed a GAN before, but I'm sorry to say that this does not come close to meeting the good article criteria. The issues are too numerous to list, but most noticeably:

• The lead is not a summary of the article and needs a complete rewrite.
• The infobox is not organized at all.
• Incredibly awkward wording.
  • "He was the first born child to the family of twelve additional children born to Sherman Hunt and Rachel Hunt."
  • "Most of Hunt's friends and family members were spinners of wool and cotton and it was their lifetime occupation."
  • "Hunt became renowned for being a prolific inventor."
  • "Many of Hunt's inventions are in actual use today and are basically the same device as when he patented them more than a hundred years ago."
• Unclear, run-on, and/or difficult to follow in many places.
  • The article repeatedly creates needless lists of some or all of his inventions.
  • Sentences such as "One time in 1816 his expertise in mechanics was applied to a flax spinner and allowed the flax mill operator and a local community member to get a patent in 1823 on a combination spinning and roping apparatus machine."
• Dubious/exaggerated info.
  • He isn't mentioned at all on the Wikipedia article for the fountain pen or street sweeper and his contribution to the sowing machine was one of many, arguably not even the most significant, despite what this article suggests.
  • It doesn't help that the top two sources are paywalled.
• Not everything is in chronological order.

--An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 22:18, 3 April 2022 (UTC)