Talk:Walther von Brauchitsch/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheQ Editor (talk · contribs) 01:48, 27 September 2014 (UTC)

Glad to help. I haven't reviewed one for some time so please give me a few days. Cheers,  ΤheQ Editor  ^Talk? 01:48, 27 September 2014 (UTC)

No problem. Take all the time you need. Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 13:19, 27 September 2014 (UTC)

Review

• The lead doesn't say much about his personal life

I have added a section regarding his personal life. - JV

• The section title says Early Life when it describes Braucitsch's life to when he was in the 30s.

Fixed. - JV

• "born on October" not "born in October"

Fixed. - JV

• Specify the date of when he was born

Fixed. - JV

• The image File:Berlin Hauptkadettenanstalt 1900.jpg needs a proper caption. According to MOS, it has to be a full sentence.

Fixed. - JV

• Is it "General Staff" or "General staff"?

It's "General Staff"; I have corrected all "General staff" mentions. - JV

• "now disguised as" - present tense? Should it be "then disguised as" or "now disguised as"?

I believe it's a matter of opinion. Therefore, I have kept it as "now disguised as". - JV

• "(in 1925)" - no brackets

Fixed. - JV

• ". In 1937." -not a sentence.

Fixed. - JV

• "So, when" - no comma

Fixed. - JV

• "This turned out not be an easy task" - grammar issues.

I don't see any grammar issues. Are you sure? - JV

• Perhaps link to "X-day" or "the invasion of France"

Already linked later in the article. - JV

• The second blockquote shouldn't be needed. You can fit it right in the paragraph.

Fixed. - JV

• "He was dismissed as Commander-in-Chief of the German Army on 19 December. He was transferred" nothing to connect the 2 sentences?

I connected the 2 sentences. - JV

• In the "Death" section, why do you need two pairs of identical references to source the paragraph?

Good point, I fixed it. - JV

• "they produced a son" - "she gave birth to a son"

Again, really a matter of opinion. - JV

• It should mention how they got divorced.

I have added some information. - JV