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Are you sure sidebars are reliable for genres? Also, ref should not be infobox when info is sourced in body.
Removed ref.
Mention in the first sentence that it is "for his fourth studio album, Yellow Dancer (2015)" and change the single release to simply saying "from the album" at the end
Add the full October release date after the "Subarachnoid hemorrhage" part
Are you sure? The release date is mentioned in the first paragraph.
"the single took No. 5 on Japanese singles charts and ended at No. 20" → "the song reached No. 5 on the Oricon Singles Chart and ended at No. 20" with the wikilink
Added mention to both the Oricon and Billboard charts
"It received positive reception from reviewers," → ""Why Don't You Play in Hell?" received positive reception from music critics," with the pipe
Done
"in September and won" → "in September 2013" and I would recommend swapping the award around with the boy's fantasy in order, as this would have a better flow
"to "Why Don't You Play in Hell?"'s recording and music video." → "to the recording and music video of "Why Don't You Play in Hell?"." or something similar
Changed to "the single's recording and music video"
Changed to "as part of his touring effort for the album" to be more inline with other music articles
"performed during encore along with" → "performed during an encore along with" with the wikilink and after the cover mention, add the info about his outfit matching the film and the sword he deployed
Added link but the source doesn't describe the sword. It is clearly visible in the image though, so I believe its still appropriate for the alt text
"Later in April," → "Later in April 2014,"
Done
Add after "from the hemorrhage" something like "as he took his jacket off" per the source
Added "after another cover of "Kimi wa Bara yori Utsukushī" as his alter ego character Akira Nise", since I believe this is the main point in the source
Remove "for viewing" since that is implied by YouTube
Add info to the audio sample about what Hoshino focuses on with the chorus
Done. Also changed its text a little bit
""Why Don't You Play in Hell?" is a" → "Musically, "Why Don't You Play in Hell?" is a" and to call into question further, are you sure it is suitable to use a sidebar for genre sourcing?
"provided viola performance." → "provided a viola performance."
Changed to "performance on viola"
If the other credits are completely listed out in the last sentence, do not use include since that implies these are not the full remaining credits
Changed to "The track also features"
"CDJournal wrote that" → "The staff of CDJournal wrote that" and the source is not displaying "fantasy" in words after the mention of experiences, unless my Google translate is broken?
Think this is a translation issue: ファンタジー is loaned from the English "fantasy". Other requested change Done
"beat throughout lively piano and" → "beat alongside lively piano and"
Done
I would re-word to something more encyclopaedic than "mad beat"
I've changed it to "crazy", if that fits?
"The lyrics describes" → "The lyrics of the song describe"
Done
Invoke [17] at the end of this sentence per the usage of a direct quote
Done
"according to analysis" → "according to an analysis"
Done
Where are the "mad" chorus and "rather than a life" parts sourced?
This was for the Madcats article. I've added it at the end of the sentence.
"received positive reception from critics." → "was met with positive reception from music critics." with the pipe
Done
"Daisuke Koyanagi (Rockin'On Japan) praised" → "Koyanagi of Rockin'On Japan praised" since his full name was already used, also terms like of, from, etc. should be used for any of these publication reviews instead of brackets
I borrowed this style from a different GA I've read. I've changed it per your request, though.
"from "complete understanding."" → "from "complete understanding"." per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
Done
Hagamuchi's review uses a semi-colon instead of a full-stop in the first place the quote uses one here so edit appropriately, also is my language translator not working here since it says "You are not alone"?
I think is fault of the translator. Semi-colons don't exist in Japanese, but I've changed it per your request.
The ref for digital download and streaming is only Japan; change to this country or add various citations if you want to make this various instead of worldwide or Japan
I understand that these refs are often in Japanese rather than English, however you still need to fix MOS:QWQ and MOS:CAPS issues with titles
I believe I've fixed this(?), but Japanese doesn't have capitalization rules so I do believe it isn't actually appropriate to correct them outside the translations.
I had written responses to your initial comments but your quick work left me with an edit conflict... Give me a few minutes and everything should be done! IanTEB (talk) 18:38, 18 April 2024 (UTC)Reply
@Kyle Peake: I've fixed most of your issues. For using CDJournal for genres, I'll leave the decision up to you: if you think I should remove it, I can no problem, but it would be unfortunate to lack a definitive genre. IanTEB (talk) 19:09, 18 April 2024 (UTC)Reply
@IanTEB: Thank you for the quick response and I appreciate your appraisal too, although there are some issues left. The announcement still says June instead of July 2013 in promotion and release, musically should be used before the genres in composition which are fine to keep upon further inspection, I'd recommend putting the track listing length in bold although maybe I'm not reading WP:PLOT right since I don't see anything about no sources for track listings, various release needs at least three retailers which should be grouped as one ref (see All Day (Kanye West song) for an example) and MOS:CAPS still applies even for foreign language references. --K. Peake10:45, 19 April 2024 (UTC)Reply
@Kyle Peake: I've added links to Taiwanese and Chinese Apple Music, which puts the region total at 4. I've also found it on the Korean and Peruvian stores. WP:PLOT was not the right policy to cite from my end, but I was referring to how plot sections don't require sources since they typically cite the work itself. Regardless, I've added refs to Apple Music and a Japanese retailer in the track listing section. Capitalization, bold text for total length, announcement date, and the beginning of composition section are fixed. IanTEB (talk) 11:19, 19 April 2024 (UTC)Reply