Talk:William Brattle/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:33, 31 January 2022 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• "where he initially" → "in which he initially"
  • Done
• Not sure why "Massachusetts" is linked in "wealthiest men in Massachusetts" and not "prominent Massachusetts cleric"
  • Done
• Comma after "Halifax, Nova Scotia" and after "Battleboro, Vermont" per MOS:GEOCOMMA
  • Done

Early life

• "started attending" → "began attending"
  • Done
• Confusing wording in the Harvard paragraph; if "entered" means he matriculated at the head of his class, shouldn't that be before the suspension?
  • Done
• "one of the wealthiest man" → "one of the wealthiest men"
  • Done

Career

• The first sentence of this section is very long and could probably be split in two for ease of reading
  • Done
• "into the House of Assembly"
  • Done
• "which he continued to serve as" → "a position which he retained"
  • Done
• ""many an English or American officer packed in his haversack."" → ""many an English or American officer packed in his haversack"." per MOS:LQ
  • Done
• "whom Brattle was a strong supporter of" → "of whom Brattle was a strong supporter"
  • Done

American Revolution and death

• "Governor" and "Lieutenant Governor" should be capitalized in the first paragraph, as they are being used as titles
  • Done
• Double check the source to make sure the diacritic in "elite" should, in fact, be there
  • Done, it is in the source cited.
• ""others of his class."" → ""others of his class"." per MOS:LQ
  • Done
• "was founded" → "was found"
  • Done
• "died down" → "subsided"
  • Done
• Comma after "October 25, 1776" per MOS:DATECOMMA
  • Done

Personal life, family and legacy

• "Thomas Brattle, during the American Revolution," → "During the American Revolution, Thomas Brattle"
  • Done

References

• Good

General comments

• Images are properly licensed and relevant
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Copyvio score looks good

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Please feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! — GhostRiver 04:35, 1 February 2022 (UTC)

• Hi, I think I've addressed all the issues you've raised. Please get back to me whenever convenient. Regards, 11:34, 1 February 2022 (UTC)Dabberoni15 (talk)
  • Thank you for making those changes; everything looks good, happy to pass this article! — GhostRiver 19:50, 2 February 2022 (UTC)