Two things: the quote about what the neighbors thought was never stated by any such neighbors, nor does the author of the quote say so. It is merely speculation by the author of the book on how the neighbors perceived the threat posed by Wilmot Redd. Also, Salem Village is a historical place which is no longer in existence and the article redirects to Danvers, Massachusetts: wikilinking isn't very helpful.
Also, most of the other changes were stylistic preferences. It's generally correct to use the full name in the first reference in a paragraph, and just the surname in later references. This, however, isn't a rule set in stone. I would say that all of the wording used is correct grammar, but it's not necessarily everyone's preference. --Keitei (talk) 22:46, 19 September 2006 (UTC)Reply
- I agree with some of your points and disagree with others. Regarding your first paragraph: I agree; points taken. Paragraph two: phrases separated with a comma should have some commonality. "Wife of fisherman Samuel Redd" doesn't have anything to do with "she was known for her irritability." Also, her having been "Born in Marblehead, Massachusetts," does not lead to "she was hanged on September 22, 1692." I reworded these sentences so they make more sense. Also, Wikipedia generally does not use titles like "Mrs.", and it's redundent to spell out her full name more than once or twice, if there's no chance of confusion. Cheers, Fang Aili talk 23:00, 19 September 2006 (UTC)Reply
- Hmm, alright. The "wife of..." I was using as an appositive (mostly because a million billion sentences beginning with "she" drive me up a wall). If it's confusing, sure, that can be changed. Birth and death seemed to be related in my mind, beginnings and endings. As for the "Mrs.", sure, I think I just didn't change it when I was editing the oldid. --Keitei (talk) 01:29, 20 September 2006 (UTC)Reply
